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on my knees to please
Fuck me hard and deep
Leave me in a shaking heep
Bite my neck untiI scream
Spank my ass until I cream
Pin me to the bedroom floor
Tell me I'm your only whore
Bend me over on my knees
And do with me as you please
I'm yours to always keep
Let me feel you hard and deep
Leave me in a shaking heep
Bite my neck untiI scream
Spank my ass until I cream
Pin me to the bedroom floor
Tell me I'm your only whore
Bend me over on my knees
And do with me as you please
I'm yours to always keep
Let me feel you hard and deep
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Re. on my knees to please
9th Jul 2016 5:15am
Re: Re. on my knees to please
9th Jul 2016 5:50am
Re. on my knees to please
9th Jul 2016 8:08am
Rugged couplets - though you are missing a verse to rhyme with scream line three where you have a typo - untell for until - do keep up the directness- makes for good erotica.
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Re: Re. on my knees to please
Perfect rhyme for line four glad you cought my typo my eyes didn't but thanks for reading sweet
Re: Re. on my knees to please
9th Jul 2016 5:26pm
Re. on my knees to please
Anonymous
9th Jul 2016 1:45pm
Suggestion for line four,
"spank my ass until I cream"
Just a thought, maybe we should do a collab?
"spank my ass until I cream"
Just a thought, maybe we should do a collab?
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Re: Re. on my knees to please
9th Jul 2016 5:09pm
Spank my ass until I cream I like it I'll be putting that in I was having a hard time with line four it felt undone
With this line it doesn't anymore thanks slow
With this line it doesn't anymore thanks slow
Re: Re. on my knees to please
9th Jul 2016 7:23pm
Re: Re. on my knees to please
9th Jul 2016 7:40pm
Re. on my knees to please
11th Jul 2016 1:10pm
Re: Re. on my knees to please
20th Aug 2016 4:33am
Re. on my knees to please
20th Aug 2016 3:38am
Not only would you be my only whore. I want you to be the whore every whore wants to be and will command you to be that whore 1000 times more! And I will lick every drop of cum that only a whore like you can be deposited in your hot soaking wet nest of fire by command!
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Re: Re. on my knees to please
20th Aug 2016 4:36am
I'm the whore that everyone wants but will never get because I'm a faithful whore to my master
Re: Re. on my knees to please
20th Aug 2016 4:41am
Then be the faithful wore to your Master and I will honor that, and my life will go on with no need or want unmet! Because I am faithful to myself and my own Master. But respect to each his/her own.
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