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Re. Janitor
Anonymous
19th Jun 2016 1:27am
That's the name of the game sir.
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Re. Janitor
Anonymous
19th Jun 2016 7:04am
it says enough.
a gem.
a gem.
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Re. Janitor
19th Jun 2016 11:36am
Re. Janitor
20th Jun 2016 7:26am
This reminded me of an old poem of mine from nearly 30 years ago when I was in my early 20's called
"Stock Room Blues". It starts out with a similar concept...
I've yet to do what I really wish
I've come home smelling like a fish
Scraping off windows covered with grime
Hardly makes my Summertime sublime
I don't live to work I work to live
More at night when girls are amative
"Stock Room Blues". It starts out with a similar concept...
I've yet to do what I really wish
I've come home smelling like a fish
Scraping off windows covered with grime
Hardly makes my Summertime sublime
I don't live to work I work to live
More at night when girls are amative
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Re: Re. Janitor
20th Jun 2016 10:38pm
Re: Re. Janitor
21st Jun 2016 3:10am
Yes, it is posted in my library here.
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/56784-stock-room-blues/
JJ
http://deepundergroundpoetry.com/poems/56784-stock-room-blues/
JJ
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Re. Janitor
21st Jun 2016 12:21pm
line placement/ word order is a bit odd.
does he live at night or work at night?
maybe this is just me.
some contrast between day and night would clear it up, two or three more words.
like the feel, the simplicity. like it says, its all we need to know, not a word more
does he live at night or work at night?
maybe this is just me.
some contrast between day and night would clear it up, two or three more words.
like the feel, the simplicity. like it says, its all we need to know, not a word more
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