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Pithy You Think?
We all have at least one burden we uniquely own
no matter how sincere others are
and find our greatest critic comes from within
The challenge may consume all our energies
tear at the fabric of our being
or be defined by observers as a whim
It is easy to be an advisor to others
when our own ship is way off course
and going nowhere without a rudder
Too busy keeping the glass shinny and clean
sterility the danger from words without movement
perhaps still obessed with the suckling of an udder?
no matter how sincere others are
and find our greatest critic comes from within
The challenge may consume all our energies
tear at the fabric of our being
or be defined by observers as a whim
It is easy to be an advisor to others
when our own ship is way off course
and going nowhere without a rudder
Too busy keeping the glass shinny and clean
sterility the danger from words without movement
perhaps still obessed with the suckling of an udder?
Published 14th Jun 2016
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18th Jun 2016 6:00am
Wow, you deserve a Purple Heart! I am not sure aside from song lyrics I have read anything 20 times! I so appreciate your kind comment.
18th Jun 2016 11:41am
This hit home. I am very critical of myself in areas that I think are serious. And require better than I have given
Nice reminder and motivator.
Thank You
Nice reminder and motivator.
Thank You
18th Jun 2016 1:49pm
I think there are several people in that boat. That is one good thing for me about computers: less paper in the wastebasket!
