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This has got to die.
This has got to die.
This has got to end.
I can't keep on like this,
I can't let you pretend.
You know how I feel,
And you target me
With your suggestive talk
And smile of snide beauty.
You push me to the limit.
I don't want to feel this way.
Why do you do this to me?
What do you want me to say?
Want me to admit my feelings?
Want me to show regret?
Well if that's what you're expecting,
It's not what you're going to get.
I am not what you seem to believe,
Despite what my heart may say.
Forget what you're trying to achieve,
I cannot and will not betray.
This has got to end.
I can't keep on like this,
I can't let you pretend.
You know how I feel,
And you target me
With your suggestive talk
And smile of snide beauty.
You push me to the limit.
I don't want to feel this way.
Why do you do this to me?
What do you want me to say?
Want me to admit my feelings?
Want me to show regret?
Well if that's what you're expecting,
It's not what you're going to get.
I am not what you seem to believe,
Despite what my heart may say.
Forget what you're trying to achieve,
I cannot and will not betray.
Published 28th Nov 2009
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28th Nov 2009 7:13pm
you've captured the struggle of "love" very well in this poem. not too long, not too short, it gives the perfect insight as to how you are feeling over this person. sounds much like a break up piece of sorts, or at least the aftermath of it all.
my only gripe is that the flow feels a little off with some lines. for example, the line "and smile of snide beauty" doesn't fit with the rhythm (or at least, that's how I feel), or at least it's thrown off by one too many syllables. however, it's no big deal.
all in all, keep up the good work.
my only gripe is that the flow feels a little off with some lines. for example, the line "and smile of snide beauty" doesn't fit with the rhythm (or at least, that's how I feel), or at least it's thrown off by one too many syllables. however, it's no big deal.
all in all, keep up the good work.
29th Nov 2009 12:02pm
Hmm. Yeah, I wasn't sure about that line but now you've said it I might rethink it so it flows a little better. Thank you :)
It's about someone, in a relationship, being tempted by another who knows they have feelings for them. It's like the other person is using the narrator's feelings against them as a sort of game, for their own fun.
Thanks again for your comments x
It's about someone, in a relationship, being tempted by another who knows they have feelings for them. It's like the other person is using the narrator's feelings against them as a sort of game, for their own fun.
Thanks again for your comments x
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