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Rhythm....(the "Wetter" Remix)
"Work to the rhythm, live to the rhythm
Love to the rhythm, slave to the rhythm.....”
breathy stacatto vocé
heart beat against
fevered body moving in
duple/triple meter,
six eight time.....
…..her aahs, ooo's
hisses and moans
screaming hips and “moist” thighs
gyrating, undulating
echoing the profane
(....you r not alone baby)
hovering overhead
thundering
warm, wet bed
six pack rippling, tight
orgasmic vibrations
love's light in flight
copulation all night,
sweet,
swept,
eliptical dance ,
up and down
so damned erotic
taking me there,
turning me
around and around
inside my pants
I'm
burning
up
Slave to the rhythm, Love to the rhythm (let me make you as moist as *Rain*....)
"Long strokes stripping bare
every inhibition",
deeper still, her orgasmic fantasies
building tension
thrust,
compression
seething hot oil
deep between the bonds
of our tight connection
balls tap loosely against
her soft, brown round
swinging like a pendulum
in slow, hard motion
accelerating
to presto-fast
kissing her lips,
in four four time
rapid
aural eruptions,
rude wet sounds
the ferocity of each full stroke
so deep,
so damned deep
stabbing her dark, plump mound,
literally blowing my mind and my.......Oooooo
….....to feel the rhythm, make love to the rhythm
the erudite voyeur
captures the crudeness of
sexual scent
wilderness beating
bodies brutally, totally spent
the bed beats against the wall
echoes the salacious event
resonating down
the blue tiles of our hallowed halls
sensual heat, ahhhh
divinely heaven sent
“Work to the rhythm, live to the rhythm
Love to the rhythm, slave to the rhythm.....”
…..Rhythm
(....inspired by "Slave To the Rhythm" by Grace Jones)
Published 2nd Jun 2016
| Edited 3rd Jun 2016
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2nd Jun 2016 6:20pm
I guess you feel the rhythm, huh? :) There's a sense of sensual roughness to this vibe -like untamed, unrestrained desire, so to speak. Hot piece, Archie!
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"the erudite voyeur
captures the crudeness of
sexual scent
wilderness beating
bodies brutally spent
the bed beats against the wall
it echoes the salacious event
resonating down
the blue tiled, hallowed halls
sensual heat, ahhhh
divinely heaven sent" <--- amazing wordplay, love it's imagery...
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"the erudite voyeur
captures the crudeness of
sexual scent
wilderness beating
bodies brutally spent
the bed beats against the wall
it echoes the salacious event
resonating down
the blue tiled, hallowed halls
sensual heat, ahhhh
divinely heaven sent" <--- amazing wordplay, love it's imagery...
4th Jun 2016 6:45pm
I spotted this a couple of days ago but did not have time to comment at the time.
So much that is good here, the sounds work perfectly together and the flow of the whole thing just slide off the tongue.
Choice words blended and yet again I have to agree with RainC as I was also going to quote the above as my most favoured part of your write.
So much that is good here, the sounds work perfectly together and the flow of the whole thing just slide off the tongue.
Choice words blended and yet again I have to agree with RainC as I was also going to quote the above as my most favoured part of your write.
3rd Aug 2016 3:56am
Oh my, this was hot!!!
Love the image you sketch and the way you play with words!
The reference to 'Moist' put a smile on my face :-)
Love the image you sketch and the way you play with words!
The reference to 'Moist' put a smile on my face :-)
