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lover ova trust
heaven is calling, angels are falling, loves lies bleeding at hells bloody door.
dreams are scattered, trust is shattered, like shards of glass on a stormy sea shore.
head in hands digging through sands, piece by piece my trust ever more, is it a notion the incoming ocean will wash my heart clean from hells bloody door.
can a heart be awoken after being so broken, can a trust be repaired after being so smeared with the blood of lost love and dreams still raw.[/font]
dreams are scattered, trust is shattered, like shards of glass on a stormy sea shore.
head in hands digging through sands, piece by piece my trust ever more, is it a notion the incoming ocean will wash my heart clean from hells bloody door.
can a heart be awoken after being so broken, can a trust be repaired after being so smeared with the blood of lost love and dreams still raw.[/font]
Published 27th Nov 2009
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27th Nov 2009 6:00pm
28th Nov 2009 12:09pm
22nd Jul 2011 5:25pm
I think this poem would benefit from editing into a slightly less prosaic-type form, to assist in reading and flow. The poem loses impact with the way it is currently formatted. I initially missed that you used repetition because it's kind of hidden.
