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Love is
Love is.....
Not taking a bullet for
the one you love
But taking on an entire army
Sea, land, and the sky above
Not only dying for them
but spending eternity with them
In heaven or hell
and in life or death
Because without them
paradise is lost
You are dead inside
true happiness is gone
If I died before my love
If I was in hell I'd break out
to be with you
Or from heaven I'd sneak down
Not taking a bullet for
the one you love
But taking on an entire army
Sea, land, and the sky above
Not only dying for them
but spending eternity with them
In heaven or hell
and in life or death
Because without them
paradise is lost
You are dead inside
true happiness is gone
If I died before my love
If I was in hell I'd break out
to be with you
Or from heaven I'd sneak down
Published 11th Jul 2011
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11th Jul 2011 5:25pm
Entire*,
Eternity**,
Paradise***.
you need to capitalize Heaven & Hell.
A comma after the 2nd 'love', 'them', 'hell', 'them', 'inside', 'love', 'you',
A period after 'army', 'above', 'them', 'death', 'lost', 'gone', 'down'.
Change the layout so it isnt so scattered....
Eternity**,
Paradise***.
you need to capitalize Heaven & Hell.
A comma after the 2nd 'love', 'them', 'hell', 'them', 'inside', 'love', 'you',
A period after 'army', 'above', 'them', 'death', 'lost', 'gone', 'down'.
Change the layout so it isnt so scattered....
13th Jul 2011 11:37pm
I love a guy who would do that for me. Its hard to find someone who would do that for you. I love it.
13th Jul 2011 11:42pm
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