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Crave
I crave for you....
Your touch and taste.
I crave for you.....
Your lips..your face.
I crave for you.....
When far away.
I crave for you..
Throughout the day.
I crave for you..
Through nighttime sweats.
I crave for you...
Your soft... Your wet.
Never have I craved before.
Never have I wanted more...
Never like this....to be sure.
Never like this....mi amor.
Your touch and taste.
I crave for you.....
Your lips..your face.
I crave for you.....
When far away.
I crave for you..
Throughout the day.
I crave for you..
Through nighttime sweats.
I crave for you...
Your soft... Your wet.
Never have I craved before.
Never have I wanted more...
Never like this....to be sure.
Never like this....mi amor.
Published 17th Mar 2016
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17th Mar 2016 4:47am
knot2much, streamlined and to the point, I feel that you did what you wanted to do with this one, I pull quoted this line
I crave for you...
Your soft... Your wet.
poem never really suspended my disbelief, would've preferred it to be more expressive, engaging, I like where you're going with it, felt it needed to be longer, good topic, love the crave idea....cheers
I crave for you...
Your soft... Your wet.
poem never really suspended my disbelief, would've preferred it to be more expressive, engaging, I like where you're going with it, felt it needed to be longer, good topic, love the crave idea....cheers
17th Mar 2016 8:06pm
Love the repetition on it, stressing the importance of the craving. I love the style/structure change from "I crave" to "Never..."
Excellent piece.
W
Excellent piece.
W
19th Mar 2016 00:44am
22nd Mar 2016 8:15pm
29th Mar 2016 8:18am
To ache, pine, and yearn for someone to the point that it leaves you restless, breathless and lifeless, is definitely called love.
14th May 2016 5:21am
