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To write love on her arms
To Write Love On Her Arms is an organization that is all about preventing people from cutting and killing themselves. This organization is important to me and I knok it is important to some of my friends. This poem is in honor of TWLOHA day.
She's going through
a rough time
She cuts herself
all of the time
I hate it when
she's like this
And I am going
to put a stop to it
I write love
on my arms
I told her to stop
making scars
I tell her about
To Write Love On Her Arms
They prevent people
from doing self harm
I kiss you with
stars above
And on your arms
I write love
She's going through
a rough time
She cuts herself
all of the time
I hate it when
she's like this
And I am going
to put a stop to it
I write love
on my arms
I told her to stop
making scars
I tell her about
To Write Love On Her Arms
They prevent people
from doing self harm
I kiss you with
stars above
And on your arms
I write love
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2nd Jul 2011 5:50pm
you rhymed time with time, but that didn't bother me. i actually rather liked this up until 'i tell her about To Write Love On Her Arms' seeing as i find its much more heartfelt to try and help them yourself first, and present them with that later. 'They prevent poeple from doing self harm' sounds so blank. like it isnt even a bad thing. this lacked emotion, i thought.
i liked the last bits, but i nearly clicked off when i got to the parts i criticized.
BY THE WAY! TWLOHA is an organization formed which aims to present hope for people struggling with addiction, depression, self injury, and thoughts of suicide... so yeah..
i liked the last bits, but i nearly clicked off when i got to the parts i criticized.
BY THE WAY! TWLOHA is an organization formed which aims to present hope for people struggling with addiction, depression, self injury, and thoughts of suicide... so yeah..
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2nd Jul 2011 5:53pm
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2nd Jul 2011 5:56pm
i know what it is, of course! me and my best friend would pass the blade around in class. we knew where help was, but we rejected it. don't beat yourself up, i used wikipedia for the last bit.
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2nd Jul 2011 5:58pm
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2nd Jul 2011 6:01pm
Levi, it is simply ridiculous for you to quit writing because of what i said. you ARE the one who clicked 'encourages honest feedback & critique'.
pleeeease dont do that if you can't handle it.
pleeeease dont do that if you can't handle it.
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2nd Jul 2011 6:02pm
i can handle it i just cant handle my friends on here say great poem, when it isnt one
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2nd Jul 2011 6:04pm
well.. admittedly i'm very blunt. & for some reason i find it very hard to get offended. im just.. mellow.
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2nd Jul 2011 6:07pm
yeah, thanks for the honest feadback, you should critque the rest of my work
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Re. To write love on her arms
14th Oct 2015 4:45am
If you are compelled to offer historical staging for your word's. Then poetry it's not. An emotional dump with desires for conversational sympathy moreover. What can your words do for us (the audience) then reach out for praise. Keep Grindin CAOS737
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