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Not Enough
There's not enough wake in my day even with the sun shining
As night's blanket covers the sky there's not enough sleep
My thoughts vanish into the air like smoke there's not enough paper
Upon my trembling flesh fingers crossed and traced there's not enough ink
There's not enough fire in my spirit leaving my heart empty
My eye's are tender and I've become blind there's not enough love
Struggling to restore day's gone by just to learn there's not enough future
As night's blanket covers the sky there's not enough sleep
My thoughts vanish into the air like smoke there's not enough paper
Upon my trembling flesh fingers crossed and traced there's not enough ink
There's not enough fire in my spirit leaving my heart empty
My eye's are tender and I've become blind there's not enough love
Struggling to restore day's gone by just to learn there's not enough future
Published 4th Feb 2016
| Edited 5th Feb 2016
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The state of near somnolence is hard to shake but you're showing signs of life here. You have a sensitive soul and you show it bravely, with real eloquence.
I'm wondering about the last line:
"Struggling to restore the day's just to learn there's not enough future"
Is there a word missing here after "day's"? I might have missed something...
Excellent work, Tommie. This is one I can relate to, my own future kind of iffy.
I'm wondering about the last line:
"Struggling to restore the day's just to learn there's not enough future"
Is there a word missing here after "day's"? I might have missed something...
Excellent work, Tommie. This is one I can relate to, my own future kind of iffy.
5th Feb 2016 2:42am
Sensitive, I've been called that before lol 😊
And yes, there should be a word after day's, I appreciate you catching that. I wasn't too sure about this write, but posted it anyway. I'm glad you liked it Crow. Thank you 😊
And yes, there should be a word after day's, I appreciate you catching that. I wasn't too sure about this write, but posted it anyway. I'm glad you liked it Crow. Thank you 😊
5th Feb 2016 4:56am
There never seems to be enough
Good things n happiness when it comes down it... Excellent introspective inking T! :)
Good things n happiness when it comes down it... Excellent introspective inking T! :)
5th Feb 2016 5:12am
5th Feb 2016 9:15am
love & sun & sleep & even poetry -
we get a little of those
& we have to make the best of it, I guess...
we get a little of those
& we have to make the best of it, I guess...
5th Feb 2016 12:41pm
