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Help me start erasing
A temperamental tidal wave
insoluble in grime they say
people staring quietly
To judge as a democracy
Casting sideways glances, verging on panic
My appearance, submerges unanimous
Some have gathered, to see an alien
some would rather guess antagonist
I am here to rival hatefulness
A task entwined with graciousness
Revival burns creativeness
I analyze impatience gripped
And true infatuation missed
A finalizing statement risked
To decide the population thinks
With refined acquired tastelessness
and three quarters of our nation Drifts
From satisfied relationships
To criticizing faithfulness
Involuntary rage inflicts
suppression leads to wounds unstitched
a psychoactive bruise imprints
the spiritual ruin your in
Remind yourself that pain is tested
if you pass with grades accepted
intolerance will hail perspective
hidden safe remand til sentence
on that day you'll face your demons
reason has abandoned feelings overwhelmed our chances fleeting metal forged by hate receiving
flames that scorch with no relieving screened by faith of peaceful leaving masked by vengeance the darks receding...
in the depths, it builds grotesque with meaning
to implode and leave the rest retreating
Overflowing and blind with treason
sabotaged your souls left bleeding redefine whats cold and sleeping
to a force of self depletion
I struggle from repeated dreaming
Attempt to breath repress the greiving
The voice of reason cries while screaming.
are the miles long as they're dangerous i strive to convert my pain and sin
Revisit joy and remain in bliss
I witness hurt and rage within-
rising unchecked hatred
Directed at the faceless
My name it bears no basis
I lost my own dictation
Im empty of embraces
So help me start erasing
insoluble in grime they say
people staring quietly
To judge as a democracy
Casting sideways glances, verging on panic
My appearance, submerges unanimous
Some have gathered, to see an alien
some would rather guess antagonist
I am here to rival hatefulness
A task entwined with graciousness
Revival burns creativeness
I analyze impatience gripped
And true infatuation missed
A finalizing statement risked
To decide the population thinks
With refined acquired tastelessness
and three quarters of our nation Drifts
From satisfied relationships
To criticizing faithfulness
Involuntary rage inflicts
suppression leads to wounds unstitched
a psychoactive bruise imprints
the spiritual ruin your in
Remind yourself that pain is tested
if you pass with grades accepted
intolerance will hail perspective
hidden safe remand til sentence
on that day you'll face your demons
reason has abandoned feelings overwhelmed our chances fleeting metal forged by hate receiving
flames that scorch with no relieving screened by faith of peaceful leaving masked by vengeance the darks receding...
in the depths, it builds grotesque with meaning
to implode and leave the rest retreating
Overflowing and blind with treason
sabotaged your souls left bleeding redefine whats cold and sleeping
to a force of self depletion
I struggle from repeated dreaming
Attempt to breath repress the greiving
The voice of reason cries while screaming.
are the miles long as they're dangerous i strive to convert my pain and sin
Revisit joy and remain in bliss
I witness hurt and rage within-
rising unchecked hatred
Directed at the faceless
My name it bears no basis
I lost my own dictation
Im empty of embraces
So help me start erasing
Published 26th Jan 2016
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26th Jan 2016 11:22pm
Just a quick one i continued from last night when i was writing. Its my first post and may need some editing. I realize the ryhme scheme isnt perfect, but it is just my freeflowing thoughts on the effects of supressing pain and anguish. Possibly shed some light on the pressure of social anxiety and hiding the pain, taking things to heart when they should be brushed off. It is mostly to explain how the box you lock your demons in is growing and continously edging closer to oveflowing and depression becoming much more damaging when it must be released.
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- Edited 25th Sep 2020 3:45am
26th Jan 2016 11:48pm
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28th Jan 2016 9:39am
I think the rhymes are just fine. As stated, easily readable. I won't go so far as to claim our styles are similar, but yours (at least in this piece) attracted me due to the almost staccato nature of the verse. The sometimes concise, sometimes drawn-out musings created something of a meandering tempo, which I myself am partial to.
I can also appreciate your use of your writing to shed light on anxieties and anguish, as these are very real issues that need to be brought more to the forefront of our collective thoughts. An admirable mission executed with a unique style, and aloof precision.
Well done, and welcome.
A.I.
I can also appreciate your use of your writing to shed light on anxieties and anguish, as these are very real issues that need to be brought more to the forefront of our collective thoughts. An admirable mission executed with a unique style, and aloof precision.
Well done, and welcome.
A.I.
