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an innocent crush
she saw me
and I saw her
I smiled and
saw the giggle in her
I was sitting across her
watching how the thin air
mess her hair
our blushed eyes met
each other in turns
as she put the hair
behind her ears
the smell of the fresh green
as we pass the fields
and I fly into her eyes
lost in my dreams with her
then again,
I search for her eyes
her sparkling eyes
painted a blush
on our faces
my teenage heart
proposed to her
in the next station
I married her
on a beach
then I searched
for her eyes
and I saw her,
walking slowly
on the platform
as I slowly
passed her
I never
saw her again.
but still,
those eyes...
paint a blush
on my face
Published 17th Jan 2016
| Edited 20th Jul 2023
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17th Jan 2016 10:44am
17th Jan 2016 11:16am
18th Jan 2016 2:14am
Ah, made me reminisce back to a certain place...thanks for the smile, D. This was a great write. <3
18th Jan 2016 4:06am
8th Aug 2017 2:32am
10th Aug 2017 4:58am
I know right., could've gone explaining more about it before the end ... but I kinda loved that abstract disappointing end :) Thank you so much for taking your time I appreciate and humbly confirm your constructive feedback :)
14th Aug 2018 9:02pm
This is a cute poem. Eyes are often enough for people to communicate.
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