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Closure
how beautiful the dust of angelic lust
she weeps and sobs for i leave her now
moving on and away somehow
ice is my core, solid and thick
the warmth does not penetrate this brick
betrayer of souls, of love, of emotions
blinded by the madness of my hate
i see her weak, i see her broken
yet i do not see her the way she see’s me
she can never know the face behind the mask
a story for nightmares to ruin your dreams
wake up, wake up and see the day
dawn has shinned on your disarray
i know you’ll find a better way
now one is lost and i care no more
for too long have i burdened my soul
why should i feel for those who don't heal?
why do you try, and before me kneel?
you are my equal, not my slave
i crave no more than your passion, your craze
your fury that excites my soul
for i cannot feel anymore
not the warmth, not the cold.
she weeps and sobs for i leave her now
moving on and away somehow
ice is my core, solid and thick
the warmth does not penetrate this brick
betrayer of souls, of love, of emotions
blinded by the madness of my hate
i see her weak, i see her broken
yet i do not see her the way she see’s me
she can never know the face behind the mask
a story for nightmares to ruin your dreams
wake up, wake up and see the day
dawn has shinned on your disarray
i know you’ll find a better way
now one is lost and i care no more
for too long have i burdened my soul
why should i feel for those who don't heal?
why do you try, and before me kneel?
you are my equal, not my slave
i crave no more than your passion, your craze
your fury that excites my soul
for i cannot feel anymore
not the warmth, not the cold.
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25th Jun 2011 3:18pm
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re: Thumbs up.....
25th Jun 2011 3:47pm
i have a few more. but i can't post them bcuz of the 8 hour restriction.
thanks Tammy :)
thanks Tammy :)
I must admit
26th Jun 2011 1:34am
realistic piece of art
26th Jun 2011 2:02am
re: realistic piece of art
26th Jun 2011 10:43am
well this was about closure. with my ex. so yeah I guess that's how you could put it :P
Closure
Anonymous
22nd Jul 2011 3:55pm
your very powerful with your words,I really liked this one!
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23rd Jul 2011 1:20am
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Anonymous
23rd Jul 2011 5:32am
i can't win with you,i give up!! yes i thought it to be powerful i can feel your emotion like when you say "you are my equal,not my slave" but that's just my humble opinion!
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24th Jul 2011 9:36am
i know :P but i have a very low opinion of myself... lol
so yes if that's what you mean then you can never beat me... :D
so yes if that's what you mean then you can never beat me... :D
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24th Jul 2011 9:37am
:o)
3rd Apr 2012 11:26am
Closure is great if you can get it,
You need that to move on..
Low opinion of yourself.. Neverrrr,
Thats not how you come accross mate. :o)
One of your first pieces too, this is the platform for the great pieces that followed ..
Nice :o)
You need that to move on..
Low opinion of yourself.. Neverrrr,
Thats not how you come accross mate. :o)
One of your first pieces too, this is the platform for the great pieces that followed ..
Nice :o)
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3rd Apr 2012 11:28am
:P thanks much.
this really came out of the blue. never meant to write a poem on closure :P
this really came out of the blue. never meant to write a poem on closure :P
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3rd Apr 2012 11:36am
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12th May 2018 9:24pm
maybe she bows down just out of respect. or maybe she knows something you dont
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12th May 2018 9:32pm
now that i think about it, this was written with intention i can no longer relate to. it's very crude and unrefined and overly decorated from the likes of my present work. i kind of find it embarrassing.
i suppose she does know something... something even i don't. i probably wouldn't have said this had you commented way back when. :P
i suppose she does know something... something even i don't. i probably wouldn't have said this had you commented way back when. :P