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Free Fall {reinvented
{5-9-2018}
pacing
picking up speed
hazy
far oh so far
no no nothing
spinning blurring
out of control
intruders invading
desperately seeking escape
falling shaking
sweating
so fucking cold
pacing hiding
emotionally bankrupt
punishing punishment
anxious
wringing icy hands
falling
throat like sand
breathless
backing away
agonizing pain
gasping grasping
spirits bleeding
pacing sniffling
blending falling
confusion
nerves are vibrating
gaze glazed locked in daze
sneering insults
screaming pacing
laughing falling
wailing
sanity lost
control is being hijacked
confusion
abandoned
promises broken
swimming in pools of nothingness
spaced out
lost hopeless
helpless
mind has finally gone
madness violence
shifting switching
careening
oh what fun
falling
falling
falling
me👣
pacing
picking up speed
hazy
far oh so far
no no nothing
spinning blurring
out of control
intruders invading
desperately seeking escape
falling shaking
sweating
so fucking cold
pacing hiding
emotionally bankrupt
punishing punishment
anxious
wringing icy hands
falling
throat like sand
breathless
backing away
agonizing pain
gasping grasping
spirits bleeding
pacing sniffling
blending falling
confusion
nerves are vibrating
gaze glazed locked in daze
sneering insults
screaming pacing
laughing falling
wailing
sanity lost
control is being hijacked
confusion
abandoned
promises broken
swimming in pools of nothingness
spaced out
lost hopeless
helpless
mind has finally gone
madness violence
shifting switching
careening
oh what fun
falling
falling
falling
me👣
Written by
SURVIVOR
Published 2nd Jan 2016
| Edited 9th May 2018
Author's Note
I found this from back when and reinvented it
5-9-2018
Word Vomit
5-9-2018
Word Vomit
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Re. falling
2nd Jan 2016 11:15am
Re: Re. falling
3rd Jan 2016 1:20am
Anonymous
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2nd Jan 2016 11:23am
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Re: Re. falling
2nd Jan 2016 9:35pm
a beautiful new write my friend, bring them demons and the squad over i miss them
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Re: Re. falling
2nd Jan 2016 11:51pm
It is a horrifying place, rereading it gives me the shudders! You'd think I'd be used to it, still freaks me out! Sending hugs & support your way for you & your brother! Thanks for replying & the compliment Tod, sincerely,➰
Re: Re. falling
2nd Jan 2016 11:55pm
You know I'll be there bells ringing LoL! I miss you to my brother, love & respect, the squad🍒🍒🍒🍒
Re. falling
3rd Jan 2016 8:07am
To me this epitomizes the American ethos of isolation, ie. challenges faced are individualistic ---open door, climbing a mountain, and so forth must be done alone.
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Re: Re. falling
3rd Jan 2016 8:52am
Actually, I've come a long way however, at times my alters take over & I "flood". It doesn't happen often but is part of my life. I refuse to give up, on anything, I'm always striving, try to find the good, humor & the beauty in people & life. I'd been miserable for so long, it's draining. I strive for a bit of peace & happiness in life before it's to late. So far it's going pretty alright.I also agree with you, it is a journey for one. One has to just raw one more step forward! Thanx for replying & the advice, I appreciate it so much! ➰
Re: Re. falling
3rd Jan 2016 3:44pm
The journey may be solitary but I think we can still learn from the paths traveled by others...
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Re: Re. falling
3rd Jan 2016 4:47pm
Where else better to learn? Will you please check out my poem / MY POTHOLE/ you'll see a bit better about my philosophy on life. I don't normally ask, but it would be most appreciated. I really appreciate you taking the xtra time with me! SURVIVOR➰
Re. falling
3rd Jan 2016 9:07pm
Re: Re. falling
3rd Jan 2016 9:47pm
swimming pool of brilliance its ok i got you ,your key board must of been stupid
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Re: Re. falling
3rd Jan 2016 10:50pm
Me to, was it fun for you?😊! Thanx, when it happens there ain't no pretty poetry words to be found. I do like swimming tho 🏊LoL! Thank You Hepcat, it's always nice seeing you around! ➰
Re: Re. falling
3rd Jan 2016 10:53pm
No a keyboard is smart, it knows its lines😊! If you only had a cell, you'd know that. I kinda would oughta like to fall into brilliance😄! Funny man you, love ya, me
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4th Jan 2016 4:57am
Re: Re. falling
4th Jan 2016 5:07am
Re. falling
Anonymous
4th Jan 2016 2:12pm
I find your parts beautiful surviving
one. This touches me deeply.
one. This touches me deeply.
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Re: Re. falling
4th Jan 2016 4:37pm
Thank you for your compliment & for replying. I graciously accept. I've read your work, very intriguing. Wishing you all the very best, SURVIVOR➰
Re. falling
7th Jan 2016 12:24pm
a very creative fall from grace - could really feel this one, brought back some sad memories and some demons I need to take out for a walk :-)
thank you my friend for sharing :-)
thank you my friend for sharing :-)
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Re: Re. falling
11th Jan 2016 4:42pm
Shit, sometimes taking these demons out one or two get loose & run rampant lol! Strange also how we feel others words, kinda comforting. Thanx for replying, I always look forward to your comments & compliments. Thanx David, ➰
Re. falling
7th Nov 2016 11:14am
I think I can relate, my lady goes through
this and i want nothing more than to hold
her .
Thank you for giving more insight
this and i want nothing more than to hold
her .
Thank you for giving more insight
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Re: Re. falling
7th Nov 2016 4:34pm
Hey Prodigy, it's truly horrifying, it's so sweet you want to help your Lady. Thanx so much for reading, understanding and the compliment they are greatly appreciated, rrespectfully,
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