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Jacks Dead and that's Just Fine
You poked me once
you poked me twice
I was wrong
To chop instead of dice
you slapped me once
you slapped me twice
I was wrong
For talking to a man, being overly nice
you punched me once
you punched me twice
I was wrong
For not enjoying, your favourite kind of vice
you kicked me once
you kicked me twice
I was wrong
For being me and not Heidi Fleiss
you stabbed me once
you stabbed me twice
I was wrong
For thinking instead of sex a hug would suffice
The beatings, the torture
The promises to change
The way that you’d blame me
Claiming you were deranged
so long I believed it, all being my fault
the violent rapes and sexual assaults
you ignored all my protests
The screams, cries and grunts
The bruises, the scars, the lumps
My hair torn out in clumps
The painful forced dry humps
Your angry shouts, my jumps
I no longer feel the guilt that thumps
Or being the dummy in your violent stunts
I don’t feel now in the wrong
After all I only killed you the once
you poked me twice
I was wrong
To chop instead of dice
you slapped me once
you slapped me twice
I was wrong
For talking to a man, being overly nice
you punched me once
you punched me twice
I was wrong
For not enjoying, your favourite kind of vice
you kicked me once
you kicked me twice
I was wrong
For being me and not Heidi Fleiss
you stabbed me once
you stabbed me twice
I was wrong
For thinking instead of sex a hug would suffice
The beatings, the torture
The promises to change
The way that you’d blame me
Claiming you were deranged
so long I believed it, all being my fault
the violent rapes and sexual assaults
you ignored all my protests
The screams, cries and grunts
The bruises, the scars, the lumps
My hair torn out in clumps
The painful forced dry humps
Your angry shouts, my jumps
I no longer feel the guilt that thumps
Or being the dummy in your violent stunts
I don’t feel now in the wrong
After all I only killed you the once
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Re. Jacks Dead and that's Just Fine
I read this then had to leave it to find the words I wanted to say...
It is a haunting read David...
You've touched, genuinely, on what abused women experience... the relief felt when the abuser is gone, permeated with a sense of disbelief that they are finally free
Unfortunately in some cases the 'abused woman' defence is not taken seriously when it goes to court, once again the imbalance between male and female is played out, in this case, in the legal system...
One would hope the woman concerned would not have to go to such lengths to be free...
It is hard for those to understand what it is like to be so dominated by an abuser that you cannot, in some cases, think for yourself....
It is a haunting read David...
You've touched, genuinely, on what abused women experience... the relief felt when the abuser is gone, permeated with a sense of disbelief that they are finally free
Unfortunately in some cases the 'abused woman' defence is not taken seriously when it goes to court, once again the imbalance between male and female is played out, in this case, in the legal system...
One would hope the woman concerned would not have to go to such lengths to be free...
It is hard for those to understand what it is like to be so dominated by an abuser that you cannot, in some cases, think for yourself....
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Re: Re. Jacks Dead and that's Just Fine
1st Jan 2016 3:34pm
extensive abuse tends to cross boundries allowing the abused to experience very similar pain and control, this is despite abuse being such a personal issue. It means that and abused boy can grow up and understand what an abused wife goes through. I could never fully understand what an abused wife goes through but I can certainly empathise and understand to a greater extent. I have written about this subject matter more than a few times and try to do my best to do it justice - I hope I manage to do that
thank you for reading and understanding :-) :-)
thank you for reading and understanding :-) :-)
Re. Jacks Dead and that's Just Fine
31st Dec 2015 00:02am
Mmmm hmm I agree with Kate. And If givin the chance id probably kill someone myself no guilt either. Is probably just cut his pecker off tho. Killing him would be giving him the easy way out. Lol great write tho.
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Re: Re. Jacks Dead and that's Just Fine
1st Jan 2016 3:36pm
thank you for such a positive response - I was extensively abused as a child and would have no difficulty in killing my abusers, guilt free. However it was not to be and all abusers got off scot free - such is life
Re: Re. Jacks Dead and that's Just Fine
1st Jan 2016 4:59pm
I'm sorry for that. I truly hope there is a place specifically for these fuckers!
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Re. Jacks Dead and that's Just Fine
somethings are beyond
my experience,
which is where other's
great writing
comes in...
my experience,
which is where other's
great writing
comes in...
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Re: Re. Jacks Dead and that's Just Fine
1st Jan 2016 3:37pm
thank you for such a great compliment, all the greater coming from a poet I greatly respect :-)
Re. Jacks Dead and that's Just Fine
31st Dec 2015 7:45am
People often wonder why they stay. Think a moment, financial, look where it got them for trusting their judgement,not to mention, familiarity, change is so damn scary. So many many reasons. Once again David, an excellent AWARENESS poem, leaving many thoughts provoked! SURVIVOR➰
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Re: Re. Jacks Dead and that's Just Fine
1st Jan 2016 3:40pm
I think that is my main reason for writing about this subject - it's to expose - it's to shine a light on life's underbelly the things we don't want to look at or talk about - I am never more satisfied with a poem if it is described as thought provoking - thank you :-)
Re. Jacks Dead and that's Just Fine
31st Dec 2015 11:44am
This could be read as either about your own personal experience of being abused or a first person view of another being victimized. Either way, as always, you pull no punches with your words.
Did you mean Lorana Bobbit instead of Heidi Fleiss?
JJ
Did you mean Lorana Bobbit instead of Heidi Fleiss?
JJ
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Re. Jacks Dead and that's Just Fine
1st Jan 2016 3:43pm
sadly Bobbit doesn't rhyme with 'twice' - I used Hiedi Fliess as a typical woman that some men would rather be married to and therefore abuse and punish their wives for simply not being her or like her
thank you for reading and your positive comments :-)
thank you for reading and your positive comments :-)
Re. Jacks Dead and that's Just Fine
22nd Jan 2016 7:34pm