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I'M DONE...
I hope your noticing, I'm leaving, I'm done. Your brainwashing and twisting of facts, leave me realizing, they're nothing more than reflections of yourself. ¤ I've gotten stronger by knowing, it never was about me. You, quite frankly, are incapable of loving another. So filled with arrogance, you'll never see, you, and you alone, are responsible for the destruction of you and me. ¤ I no longer want counseling. It wouldn't help. How can you mend your ways when, unlike me, you honestly believe, you can do no wrong. ¤ I am no longer your puppet on a string. Your controlling, abusive and backstabbing ways forced me to learn how to care about myself. I know now, you never would, could or will, care for anyone but yourself. ¤ At one time, your long silences had me walking on eggshells. Now they've become my retreat. ¤ Every breath and word out of your mouth is nothing more than toxic bullshit. Finally, I can honestly say, I'm done. ¤ (Written for comp, Narcissism)
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Re. I'M DONE...
24th Dec 2015 8:51pm
At one time, your long silences had me walking on eggshells. Now they've become my retreat. I hated the silences. And I definitely relate to all of this. Don't stay in a toxic relationship where your the only one trying to make anything work and trying to better yourself won't work if the other person is putting you down all the time. Great write (:
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Re: Re. I'M DONE...
24th Dec 2015 9:05pm
When I seen the comp, I thought why not. I've been surrounded by it my whole life. I also agree with you! Thank for the feedback!➰
Re. I'M DONE...
24th Dec 2015 9:38pm
a strong, powerful poem written by a strong powerful woman, so well written leaving no doubt about its conclusion :-)
an excellent write to be proud of :-)
an excellent write to be proud of :-)
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Re: Re. I'M DONE...
24th Dec 2015 10:17pm
Thank you David, however your making my head swell! And it gives me the warm fuzzys LoL! I'm a fool for the comps! Thanx again, ➰
Re: Re. I'M DONE...
24th Dec 2015 10:41pm
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Yeah, what Dave said
Without doubt a strong write. The situation depicted gives pause to think
Gotta play nice, makes the work easier..
On the technical side, thought the layout was "interesting to
the point of being a bit distracting.
Far as the Competition, the write did personally inspired me but
I came at it from a different angle.
We'll talk. : )
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Yeah, what Dave said
Without doubt a strong write. The situation depicted gives pause to think
Gotta play nice, makes the work easier..
On the technical side, thought the layout was "interesting to
the point of being a bit distracting.
Far as the Competition, the write did personally inspired me but
I came at it from a different angle.
We'll talk. : )
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Re: Re. I'M DONE...
26th Dec 2015 7:02pm
Being done & leaving wasn't "the easy way out." It took alot of observation, pain & facing the facts. I worked my ass off in those silent retreats. I also learned alot. Careful reflection, left me with no choice, myself or him, who was more important! See, not so easy. Now, I did all this, but remember, the ending was meant for comp, & emotionally, I left! I thought it was a clever & healthy ending😉😉😉! Had fun though! ➰
Re: Re. I'M DONE...
24th Dec 2015 11:29pm
Re. I'M DONE...
29th Dec 2015 2:09am
Powerful strength and courage in these beautifully written lines. Thank you for sharing what has been a heart breaking reality for many of us. Breaking the silence begins with incredible works such as these.
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Re: Re. I'M DONE...
14th Jan 2016 4:18am
I'm sorry for not replying sooner! Yes, I agree, breaking the silence is our most powerful weapon we have! That's what we are doing & hoping along the way being able to show fellow survivors, also soldiers. Thanx so much, for your reply & awesome AWARENESS Much love and respect, ➰
Re. I'M DONE...
30th Dec 2015 4:54am
Thank you for your kind words. I understand my world is sometimes hard to swallow, but if it helps just one person, then it is all worth it. Once again, thanx for reading & the kind words, SURVIVOR➰
Re. I'M DONE...
1st Jan 2016 8:16pm
I especially like the strength in this poem. Your open ness and thorough statements are easily enjoyed!
Great read...:)
Great read...:)
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Re: Re. I'M DONE...
1st Jan 2016 11:06pm
Thank you for replying & enjoying, as well as the compliment. I'll take it all & run with it! Thanx again,➰
Re. I'M DONE...
13th Jan 2016 2:55pm
This is great, being done is the hardest decision one has to make from within, sometimes we make that decision to late but sometimes we can't help ourself. I loved it.
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Re: Re. I'M DONE...
14th Jan 2016 10:42am
I hoped at times that I did more than just leave emotionally. But it's wrote for a comp, so I changed my ending to actually physically leaving. I know I know, however, to us, well we made a Vow to not only man but to the very man who gave us strength & courage to rise each & every time after after time, yes God. I can't walk away from sworn oath, it's not me being true and thru. But it's the ending I have wished upon many stars for, I don't usually recommend my poems but my whole marriage beginning to now, "BRICK AND MORTAR" it's true and thru, that ain't no shit! LoL anyway, I have mad respect for you & such pure pleasure & honor that you visit our, mine page. Thank You, Forsaken, compliments & replying are always enjoyed,
SURVIVOR➰
SURVIVOR➰
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Re. I'M DONE...
11th Feb 2016 3:06am
they do not realize the loss, until we leave.. .
because they are too busy ignoring our feelings
love and respect.. putting others and things over
us.. .
But as our minds are made up to step out that door
it must be (quietly) in situations like this- might I
add. Could go and on.
I feel every part of your beautiful self when reading
you. Almost a mirror's image darling.
-Howlings
because they are too busy ignoring our feelings
love and respect.. putting others and things over
us.. .
But as our minds are made up to step out that door
it must be (quietly) in situations like this- might I
add. Could go and on.
I feel every part of your beautiful self when reading
you. Almost a mirror's image darling.
-Howlings
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Re: Re. I'M DONE...
23rd Feb 2016 10:06pm
HOWLINGS, thank you so much for replying. Yes it must be done in secrecy, the most dangerous part of extraction is leaving. Most domestic disputes end in brazen violence. When I read your work, I also feel a mirror image as well. Thank you for commiserating with me. Much love and respect,
SURVIVOR
SURVIVOR
Re. I'M DONE...
22nd Feb 2016 7:59pm
So much strength in these words! Enough is enough, we all hit our breaking point. There's nothing better than realizing a situation is bad for you and exiting. It feels so great to know you love yourself enough to know that you deserve better. One of the best feelings life has to bring. I can relate. Really enjoyed this strong write.
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Re: Re. I'M DONE...
23rd Feb 2016 10:12pm
I agree, however I stay, 700$ a month you simply can't live on. But both eyes are wide open & I'll remain a step ahead. Thank You so much for commenting & the compliment, they are gratefully appreciated. Much love & respect,
SURVIVOR
SURVIVOR