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Peace, Love & Still
Maybe it's in the exhale
on waking from a bad dream to find that everything
is as it was
before you fell asleep
or in 3am's gentle snow avoiding the window glass
as dew iced for ballet
and dancing to silence -
the quiet, steady ringing manifested in stillness
until you sip your riserva
and break it
Maybe it rests in your subconscious
in the resonance of Earth's cycles
the electromagnetic charge
in the atmosphere -
or the static rush and wane
of waves
pulsing through you
crashing a heartbeat to claim your understanding
that this
here
is home
but whatever it is
is most definitely unleashed in the explosion
in all the burning
thirst
yearning of infatuation
and captured in the calm
of giving up
*spoken excellently by Violet
www.deepundergroundpoetry.com/poets/violet/*
on waking from a bad dream to find that everything
is as it was
before you fell asleep
or in 3am's gentle snow avoiding the window glass
as dew iced for ballet
and dancing to silence -
the quiet, steady ringing manifested in stillness
until you sip your riserva
and break it
Maybe it rests in your subconscious
in the resonance of Earth's cycles
the electromagnetic charge
in the atmosphere -
or the static rush and wane
of waves
pulsing through you
crashing a heartbeat to claim your understanding
that this
here
is home
but whatever it is
is most definitely unleashed in the explosion
in all the burning
thirst
yearning of infatuation
and captured in the calm
of giving up
*spoken excellently by Violet
www.deepundergroundpoetry.com/poets/violet/*
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22nd Jun 2011 1:51pm
this is lovely, lil lady.
\'but it is most definitely unleashed
in the explosion
in all the insatiable burning
thirst
and yearning
of infatuation\'
\'but it is most definitely unleashed
in the explosion
in all the insatiable burning
thirst
and yearning
of infatuation\'
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re: ...
22nd Jun 2011 1:56pm
thanks, vi! i'm still tweaking it because it was so haphazardly tossed up, but it's coming together i think. [:
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Pure art!
22nd Jun 2011 3:55pm
Your work is amazing Jestalessa!
I loved to read it!
You write very artistic!
Congratulations!
I loved to read it!
You write very artistic!
Congratulations!
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re: Pure art!
22nd Jun 2011 5:04pm
Peace, Love & Still
22nd Jun 2011 5:17pm
nice jesta.
i see you changed it around a bit,still a great read none the lessa.
i see you changed it around a bit,still a great read none the lessa.
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re: Peace, Love & Still
haha!! "none the lessa" - that's so bad it's hilarious, Eamon. well...it can't be bad, because that's what i made the name for. :D
i hope it's changed for the better? [:
i hope it's changed for the better? [:
re: re: Peace, Love & Still
22nd Jun 2011 5:32pm
i thought that the first draft was fine in its entirety,i had an issue with the fifth line on the last stanza,but i could see its value.
this draft is also great in its entirety,better? its no worse.
in fact its still really good.
this draft is also great in its entirety,better? its no worse.
in fact its still really good.
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I was having
22nd Jun 2011 7:25pm
re: I was having
22nd Jun 2011 8:51pm
review
22nd Jun 2011 9:49pm
Really enjoyed the etherial atmosphere you paint and the the hollow it induces, the climax right before the end and then sublimely slipping back into the void with spirituality
the 2nd stanza and the second to last stand out to my imagination
the 2nd stanza and the second to last stand out to my imagination
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re: review
thank you so much, DY, you always seem to catch something i didn't notice. [:
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23rd Jun 2011 6:56am
So trapped, so determined. There's a reason in this poem, perhaps for the hell of rhyming we speak of these things. You have the ability to say and hide all at once. Great job. :)
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23rd Jun 2011 8:16am
yeah, i'm definitely in a bit of a rut with the rhyming lately, though this one was entirely unintended. thanks so much for the good word. [:
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2nd Jul 2011 8:10am
Need
Anonymous
7th Jul 2011 8:45am
[Maybe it rests in your subconscious
in the resonance of Earth's cycles
the electromagnetic charge
in the atmosphere -
or the static rush and wane
of waves
pulsing through you
crashing a heartbeat to claim your understanding
that this
here
is home ] This strophe struck me hard, in the back of my knees. I am intimately acquainted with this level of understanding and desire. Beautiful piece, Jestalessa.
in the resonance of Earth's cycles
the electromagnetic charge
in the atmosphere -
or the static rush and wane
of waves
pulsing through you
crashing a heartbeat to claim your understanding
that this
here
is home ] This strophe struck me hard, in the back of my knees. I am intimately acquainted with this level of understanding and desire. Beautiful piece, Jestalessa.
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re: Need
7th Jul 2011 9:00am
Love this
8th Aug 2011 2:45pm
re: Love this
thank you! it's not so much talent as reading others, expanding thoughts and taking good critiques, though. appreciate your popping in. [:
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LA
17th Aug 2011 1:45pm
You created such a wonderful piece and Vi definitely did it justice, beautiful. Well done.
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re: LA
thanks LA, stuff has been rather rough coming out these days. i've put a few up (including this one) and edited them tons after submission, but i think we both found a happy place for this write. your feedback is highly valued 'round here, madam. [:
re: ha ha
Calm
Anonymous
- Edited 21st Oct 2011 3:11pm
21st Oct 2011 3:10pm
love love love. I was captivated from start to finish. Eloquently injecting silk into my mundane daily behaviour.
Plus Violet has a voice that could melt the hearts of the saints, you were MADE to read out poetry.
Plus Violet has a voice that could melt the hearts of the saints, you were MADE to read out poetry.
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re: Calm
21st Oct 2011 4:23pm
thank you so much! it's been a little while since i've visited this one.
and i will be forever grateful to Ms. V. for her beautiful reading. [:
and i will be forever grateful to Ms. V. for her beautiful reading. [:
re: :o!
11th Jan 2012 7:47pm
A nice contrast
21st Mar 2012 11:02pm
So much here that can be looked at subjectively by the reader. This is truly AWESOME! Thanks for sharing with DU!
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re: A nice contrast
21st Mar 2012 11:12pm
of course! you lot are my strength for this bizness sometimes. thank you so much - from violet as well. [:
re: re: A nice contrast
22nd Mar 2012 2:13am
Just curious what is Violet's accent? Hope I am not offending her by guessing Irish?
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re: re: re: A nice contrast
22nd Mar 2012 7:24am