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Dance
He gave her a note—
Will you go with me to the dance?
and she the tomboy said yes.
He drives her to the park where
she will lose her shoes in the trimmed
grass, wet with dew and moonlight.
Will you go with me to the dance?
and she the tomboy said yes.
He drives her to the park where
she will lose her shoes in the trimmed
grass, wet with dew and moonlight.
Published 20th Nov 2015
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20th Nov 2015 4:24pm
20th Nov 2015 4:38pm
Oohhh I'm so glad you think so, sweetheart! I knew not to be suspicious of the ease from which it was born, it felt so right.
20th Nov 2015 4:40pm
20th Nov 2015 4:48pm
21st Nov 2015 7:53am
it leaves me pondering: I'm not sure if it was a pleasant evening or something tragic.
poetry that draws the reader beneath the verse's surface...
poetry that draws the reader beneath the verse's surface...
30th Sep 2017 1:10pm
i felt this was too short. I like the metaphoric description of nature, in the second stanza.
2nd Oct 2017 9:22am
