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Where you Goin?!
Why run, when im tryinq to run to you? baby you like, part of my half, i cant live wit out you- baby you like, part of air, i cant breathe without you- babe if you qo, you my dream, cant sleep wit out you- maybe its, you a part of my room, i cant be wit out you- da sweet notes in ya voice, cant sinq wit out you- all da more reason to brinq, i cant love without you-
Published 18th Jun 2011
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18th Jun 2011 1:20am
what is going on with the grammer im not try to be mean or anything but you kinda threw me out of the poem when you said"baby you like,part of air" wat happen to the r....... anyway it was good.
18th Jun 2011 1:34am
there was no r, the way I wrote it is exactly how it was suppose to be written. When I wrote this, I wrote this TO some one, and with the emotion I tried to make clear with the rythmic order of the words, almost as if I was sayin it to her in person. Its all qood that's why God made questions, thank you-
22nd Dec 2012 11:52pm
11th Jan 2013 5:10am
Lol! Uneducated qanqster talk?! First of all, I am hiqhly educated, not sure but I'd say by readinq this comment I smell a hint of judqment. Its not my qrammar to even piqk out, its about tryinq to qet a picture of the point of view bein portrayed. A lot of my poems will be rewritten anyways, I don't have precious time on my hands to really write like most people, sorry for bein uneducated-
