Goodbye

Oh wow this is so sad and touching...i know the feeling if hitting rock bottom...great expression of sorrowful feelings

I found this to be very chilling. It is an opportunity for the reader to peer into the thoughts of those who contemplate this path.

I am a bit jilted on the subject, my life having been deeply affected from suicides of individuals whom I didn't even know. As such, I can tell you that the aftermath of such an action could never be fully contemplated or understood by those who commit it. That being said, I think for some of us, just living life is the most courageous act that we can do. I am inspired daily by people who struggle with strife and continue on in the face of their struggles.

This piece means a lot to me. I really appreciate you sharing it with us. Hope to read more from you.

This is the first poem I've ever written and it means a lot to me to see a reader having such deep feelings about it. Thank you for reading and commenting!

Clever flow of words. Most people think that pills or jumping is the usual option, in reality, hanging is a "popular" option."In blissful relief, Her spirit sighs, Letting go of her grief, And saying goodbye." Is truly haunting! You can't tell it's your first😉!

Thanks for the kind comment!

dark, emotional, raw, very real ink

hullo, welcome to DU

good job

couple of suggestions to think about:

slashed wrists could be an overdone phrase, maybe try think of an alternate couple of words, or even a word to replace slashed

first stanza has a nice flow, its very apt for speaking or spoken.

in the second you've changed into -ing words, you could keep the consistency of the first stanza by changing them:

Slashed wrists
Blood runs
Her heart twists
Limbs ache

..like you did at the start of the third:

"Arms tired "

thing is, I know it's kinda hard to get cos I do it all the time, but if you start a poem in the past, it's best to try keep it that way, one way of ensuring that is to minimize -ing words.

anyhow, just suggestions

good stuff, keep it up

Thanks for the suggestions! I'll keep them in mind.

Dark, yet poignant. Suicide is so difficult for some people to understand, especially phrases like "nothing to lose." It is one of those things you can't explain to someone, because they only see from the outside looking in; they get it or they don't, from general concept to literal demonstration.

Nice rhyme scheme, solid piece on a difficult topic. Well done!
--Esther

Thanks!