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seven
Unrushed, the hours gather their seconds into minutes
neatly, always, one. by. one. unlike my thoughts
time doesn't stand still, and only sometimes, I forget.
Published 29th Sep 2015
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30th Sep 2015 8:25am
Good start but not sure..
neatly, always, one. by. one.
Worked for me
Maybe..
always
one
by
one
Might have worked better
Vertical in story telling is often a creative tool to apply in small doses than to think must conform always horizontal on every line
But obviously I saw something good in this start by you as rarely comment let alone give out advice xD
Rose
neatly, always, one. by. one.
Worked for me
Maybe..
always
one
by
one
Might have worked better
Vertical in story telling is often a creative tool to apply in small doses than to think must conform always horizontal on every line
But obviously I saw something good in this start by you as rarely comment let alone give out advice xD
Rose
ah, well then, Im very honoured that you commented ^~^
...was originally just going to post this as a sentence ...Im not used to the whole writing vertically thing, but I think I'll get there...eventually, ....perhaps.
...might even attempt to edit...when I feel bolder.
Thanks for the advice :D
...was originally just going to post this as a sentence ...Im not used to the whole writing vertically thing, but I think I'll get there...eventually, ....perhaps.
...might even attempt to edit...when I feel bolder.
Thanks for the advice :D
30th Sep 2015 6:29pm
No worries have fun with it
It's why we are here
To release emotions dark or otherwise
But a sprinkling of fun is a good thing too xD
It's why we are here
To release emotions dark or otherwise
But a sprinkling of fun is a good thing too xD
