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Pie
Cigarette stubs,
Smokey tips,
Humorous quips,
Forked tongue,
Studded sides,
Shaggy hair,
Transparent eyes,
Empty stares,
Cracked skin,
Serrated teeth,
Paper thin,
Ink underneath.
Smokey tips,
Humorous quips,
Forked tongue,
Studded sides,
Shaggy hair,
Transparent eyes,
Empty stares,
Cracked skin,
Serrated teeth,
Paper thin,
Ink underneath.
Published 18th Sep 2015
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18th Sep 2015 11:05pm
Not your best, most of it didn't make sense.
And the ending wasn't very good.
And the ending wasn't very good.
19th Sep 2015 1:59am
It's about me sitting outside, smoking, and writing poetry. Kind of a minimalist take on it though, understandable that you didn't get it at first
23rd Sep 2015 10:01pm
I think the title is what threw me off...I didn't see a connection to the piece. Not a terrible piece, but not the clearest either.
23rd Sep 2015 10:46pm
Hahaha yea I made the title completely random on purpose, part of the charm. :)
