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Her Box
It was when she put my cock in her mouth
That I knew she meant business
Initially I felt excited
Dirty
Wanted
That she desires me in this way
While she fingered her shaved pussy
Telling me that I would be the one she fucks
While her fiancé is relocated for work
Being away from her made me question the whole thing
Wondering if this is the right thing to do
If I am destroying something that existed before me
Yet, when I saw her, all those doubts ran like scared mice
And I was on fire once again.
After a year
I probably liked her more than I am willing to admit
She sucked a mean cock and was the first to let me take her in the ass
Not being able to have her made her more desirable
The sex more intense
It was not until she was married and had moved to her new home
With her now husband
That a box arrived at my doorstep
A box of cute gifts
Stuffed animals
Small jewelry
Mix tapes
That they were recognizably
All the stuff I had given her
A box of feelings?
Memories? I wondered what to do with all this.
What it signifies
What to do next.
It was not a road I could go down anymore
Like my favorite rock band just broke up and are not putting out any more albums.
Did it hurt?
The shock and surprise of it was more hurtful than any dissolving could be.
I convinced myself I didn't care.
After about a week or so
I got myself up and out
Went to the bar with my friends
Scanned the scene and said to myself smiling
"Next?"
That I knew she meant business
Initially I felt excited
Dirty
Wanted
That she desires me in this way
While she fingered her shaved pussy
Telling me that I would be the one she fucks
While her fiancé is relocated for work
Being away from her made me question the whole thing
Wondering if this is the right thing to do
If I am destroying something that existed before me
Yet, when I saw her, all those doubts ran like scared mice
And I was on fire once again.
After a year
I probably liked her more than I am willing to admit
She sucked a mean cock and was the first to let me take her in the ass
Not being able to have her made her more desirable
The sex more intense
It was not until she was married and had moved to her new home
With her now husband
That a box arrived at my doorstep
A box of cute gifts
Stuffed animals
Small jewelry
Mix tapes
That they were recognizably
All the stuff I had given her
A box of feelings?
Memories? I wondered what to do with all this.
What it signifies
What to do next.
It was not a road I could go down anymore
Like my favorite rock band just broke up and are not putting out any more albums.
Did it hurt?
The shock and surprise of it was more hurtful than any dissolving could be.
I convinced myself I didn't care.
After about a week or so
I got myself up and out
Went to the bar with my friends
Scanned the scene and said to myself smiling
"Next?"
Published 18th Aug 2015
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18th Aug 2015 4:25pm
"It was when she put my cock in her mouth
That I knew she meant business"
~sweet attention-getter of a beginning line, man! whew.. kkk, I'm here..lmsao*
"Not being able to have her made her more desirable
The sex more intense"
~interesting proclamation & most true in this kinda situation.
"The shock and surprise of it was more hurtful than any dissolving could be.
I convinced myself I didn't care. "
~love the vulnerable reflections here darlin, owie indeed..;(
and your end.. gives hope to fresh memories waiting to be.. effective poetry m'dear, making the bar & 'next order'- a lovely solace. Cuervo tips of a morn, to you! adores ur reflections, packed with sexy~heart-ripping lines. hughug mista D..
~d
That I knew she meant business"
~sweet attention-getter of a beginning line, man! whew.. kkk, I'm here..lmsao*
"Not being able to have her made her more desirable
The sex more intense"
~interesting proclamation & most true in this kinda situation.
"The shock and surprise of it was more hurtful than any dissolving could be.
I convinced myself I didn't care. "
~love the vulnerable reflections here darlin, owie indeed..;(
and your end.. gives hope to fresh memories waiting to be.. effective poetry m'dear, making the bar & 'next order'- a lovely solace. Cuervo tips of a morn, to you! adores ur reflections, packed with sexy~heart-ripping lines. hughug mista D..
~d
19th Aug 2015 3:32am
darksighs...I love your commentary!
The ending did give way to memories instead of relishing in the hurt. Thanks for the hugs and backatcha. Cheers to you too m'lady. :)
The ending did give way to memories instead of relishing in the hurt. Thanks for the hugs and backatcha. Cheers to you too m'lady. :)
18th Aug 2015 9:54pm
You rogue! I'd like to hear about that next in line, given the quality of this tale (tail?). You spin a mean yarn, DPW, and that first line is a sure-fire attention getter, followed by compulsive erotic reading. Fine work! Was her name Pandora, by chance?
19th Aug 2015 3:35am
You know, I wish I had thought about Pandora's Box, I probably would have tried to lace that in there. It would have made it a bit more symbolic. Thank you for the comment Crow. Always a pleasure to hear from you. Glad you enjoyed this.
19th Aug 2015 8:33am
This is technically lovely. Realistic and very naked on your part. You let the reader expose it, peel it back, or at least it feels that way. I thoroughly enjoyed this. It felt honest regardless of the rights and wrongs. A grand write. I hope she didn't engage cynicism too much for there is much beauty in the innocent and goodness in the not so. Write on!
19th Aug 2015 3:20pm
Thank you ImperfectedStone (which I love your name). I was aiming at something erotic with a stroke of reality. I have only spoke with her a few times since and her life is very different than the one she probably dreamed it would be. But generally she seems to be doing well. I don't know how she looks back on these times or if at all. Thank you for the read and comment.
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20th Aug 2015 10:20pm
You know, the box was not sent by her, but by her new husband subsequent to finding out about our tryst. So...needless to say, I threw the box away. I did not want to be haunted by all that stuff. And it was taking up room. I am glad you enjoyed this piece and thank you for the comment and read :)
