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who am i to you?
wrap your hands around my neck;
end it. end it.
make this the best ever.
bring all of your pleasure, but give me pain.
you're so bittersweet.
i just want to feel your skin,
even if it's the last time;
my heart's withering to it's death.
take the misery away
just in one night.
come back, pretend you're mine.
and take it.
keep what you've broken,
because baby i don't want it anymore.
i'll be ghost to you,
what difference would it make..
end it. end it.
make this the best ever.
bring all of your pleasure, but give me pain.
you're so bittersweet.
i just want to feel your skin,
even if it's the last time;
my heart's withering to it's death.
take the misery away
just in one night.
come back, pretend you're mine.
and take it.
keep what you've broken,
because baby i don't want it anymore.
i'll be ghost to you,
what difference would it make..
Published 18th Aug 2015
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18th Aug 2015 5:07pm
The torment of a destructive love, and the acknowledgement that it has run its course, are both well conveyed in this bittersweet verse. Sad.
Lulu
Lulu
19th Aug 2015 3:51am
Well, my wording may not be the best, but I suppose, it is to how one would decipher, as long as the audience feels something; whether it is in relation or not. Yes, it's a tormented love, but probably just from my side. I make it seem as if I would like for him to kill me, with his hands wrapped around my neck, when in reality, I want him to give me dominate sex - to choke me... Which could kill me, yes, but I tried to word it as to where he is giving me this sex, and to finally kill the feelings that I have left for him.. I already feel like a ghost to him, so if he'd just give me one last night.... What difference would it make if he killed what I feel for him, when I'm already nothing.. I just want these feelings to go away, if I am no longer in the picture...
(if you are catching my drift)
Also, thank you, I really do like this piece; am pleasantly surprised with how it came out. :-)
(if you are catching my drift)
Also, thank you, I really do like this piece; am pleasantly surprised with how it came out. :-)
Anonymous
18th Aug 2015 9:38pm
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19th Aug 2015 3:52am
Thank you very much, I am glad you enjoy my choice of wording. Sometimes, I feel as if my words are weak, but if read correctly, one could feel it all. <3
26th Aug 2015 11:08pm
No, no, I understood exactly that...that you want the feelings that you have for him to be ended, not your actual life to end; yes, all works for me!
Lulu
Lulu
