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One
You tower above us,
a tsunami shadowing
feeble sand castles of hope
along shores of misguided trust.
One,
you rise above us all
the incarnation of Hate.
Wrath, fire, and fury
blistering through
eyes set deep in madness,
with a single motion
scattered amongst the rocks,
we fall, now, merely pieces of souls.
Then you're gone...
Gliding cleanly away
into seas of tranquility
while ravaged in the remnants
of your ire,
torn flesh, (flesh of you),
desperately tries to fuse
itself into unity.
There, with your great shadow
once again rearing it's face
at the very heart of hope,
we know all too well
the consequences of our sin.
Published 24th Jul 2015
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Anonymous
25th Jul 2015 00:38am
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25th Jul 2015 3:24am
Thank you, Gabriel. This was my first ever attempt at a non rhyming structure. Thought I'd resurrect it for some fresh eyes here. Glad you enjoyed.
Michael
Michael
25th Jul 2015 6:05am
"feeble sand castles of hope
along shores of misguided trust."
~the vulnerability of these lines have me wrapping you in healing arms love...*hughugkiss
*shiny eyes here, even in your fancy free verse, ty fer postin this..
the images build as a wave here, peak, and recede.
Knowing of this poem I won't go into detail 'cept to say I see the strength of you
here as a survivor & many suffer this early in life, in pure innocence.
Another, in power position, has hurt/taken advantage of that..makes you exceptional.
heart~peace & my love, Michael,
~d
along shores of misguided trust."
~the vulnerability of these lines have me wrapping you in healing arms love...*hughugkiss
*shiny eyes here, even in your fancy free verse, ty fer postin this..
the images build as a wave here, peak, and recede.
Knowing of this poem I won't go into detail 'cept to say I see the strength of you
here as a survivor & many suffer this early in life, in pure innocence.
Another, in power position, has hurt/taken advantage of that..makes you exceptional.
heart~peace & my love, Michael,
~d
11th Oct 2015 4:27pm
"Knowing of this poem I won't go into detail 'cept to say I see the strength of you
here as a survivor & many suffer this early in life, in pure innocence.
Another, in power position, has hurt/taken advantage of that..makes you exceptional. "
Dearest ~T,
I know you think I purposely shunned you on this reply. That was never the case. I cried when I read it because to hear you say you thought me exceptional was too much to bear. I knew I was not, and only prayed for the strength to try to live up to that for a while longer. I have failed miserably. I am now the wave that crashes into everything I love, breaking it into shambles when hurt or threatened, and then gliding away peacefully, till I rear up my ugly head again.
I am broken in a special way, and people who try to hold me always, always are cut by my sharp edges, no matter how delicately they handle me. I will not, cannot, accept full responsibility for the shambles that have become of "us," but I will accept that some of my responses to the hurts I have felt have been spiteful, cold-hearted, and utterly unacceptable by any standards I have every held. I apologize to you here, publicly, because that's we both have tried and convicted each other, and yet still keep coming back to each other and reopening wounds best left alone.
I beg you please let's break this cycle. My heart will always be yours, and I cannot imagine life without you in it... but the devastation must end, even if walking away permanently is the only way to accomplish it. Many reasons why I pray that is not the answer, and none of them selfish. Even so, I must admit at this juncture it seems the safest choice for us both.
I wish you peace, love, and happiness in all you do, my love, no matter your decision. Always know that, and I thank you for the majick you touched my life with. However briefly it lasted, it was the truest depth of love, and the only touch of happiness this life has ever known. I will cherish the memory fondly till my dying days. You are an amazing woman, ~T. I wish you every blessing.
Sincerely,
Ur Michael
here as a survivor & many suffer this early in life, in pure innocence.
Another, in power position, has hurt/taken advantage of that..makes you exceptional. "
Dearest ~T,
I know you think I purposely shunned you on this reply. That was never the case. I cried when I read it because to hear you say you thought me exceptional was too much to bear. I knew I was not, and only prayed for the strength to try to live up to that for a while longer. I have failed miserably. I am now the wave that crashes into everything I love, breaking it into shambles when hurt or threatened, and then gliding away peacefully, till I rear up my ugly head again.
I am broken in a special way, and people who try to hold me always, always are cut by my sharp edges, no matter how delicately they handle me. I will not, cannot, accept full responsibility for the shambles that have become of "us," but I will accept that some of my responses to the hurts I have felt have been spiteful, cold-hearted, and utterly unacceptable by any standards I have every held. I apologize to you here, publicly, because that's we both have tried and convicted each other, and yet still keep coming back to each other and reopening wounds best left alone.
I beg you please let's break this cycle. My heart will always be yours, and I cannot imagine life without you in it... but the devastation must end, even if walking away permanently is the only way to accomplish it. Many reasons why I pray that is not the answer, and none of them selfish. Even so, I must admit at this juncture it seems the safest choice for us both.
I wish you peace, love, and happiness in all you do, my love, no matter your decision. Always know that, and I thank you for the majick you touched my life with. However briefly it lasted, it was the truest depth of love, and the only touch of happiness this life has ever known. I will cherish the memory fondly till my dying days. You are an amazing woman, ~T. I wish you every blessing.
Sincerely,
Ur Michael
