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Last Sunset
I stand before you naked
feeling surprisingly beautiful
not a shamed of my curves
my soul open for you to see
passion yearning for your touch
heart full of bursting passion
don't need to speak words of love
I hear them in the whisper
of your breath as you moan
as we dance by night sounds
under moonlight and star lit sky
peacefulness in each other’s arms
amazing all that we share
yet you say we are not close
my heart stumbles over its veins
wanders around my chest in a daze
bewildered as it writes your name
with fresh pumped blood on my soul
I know that each day goes by
it could be the last I feel your love
i'm holding you tight till the next sunset falls
feeling surprisingly beautiful
not a shamed of my curves
my soul open for you to see
passion yearning for your touch
heart full of bursting passion
don't need to speak words of love
I hear them in the whisper
of your breath as you moan
as we dance by night sounds
under moonlight and star lit sky
peacefulness in each other’s arms
amazing all that we share
yet you say we are not close
my heart stumbles over its veins
wanders around my chest in a daze
bewildered as it writes your name
with fresh pumped blood on my soul
I know that each day goes by
it could be the last I feel your love
i'm holding you tight till the next sunset falls
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Re: Last Sunset
6th Jul 2015 3:09am
Hello my friend; Was not sure how to respond to this one, but then, in honesty I guess, as it always should be with friends... It starts out beautiful, and is still beautiful through out, as are you my sweet darlin... It took a sad turn there in the end, an yet, it still felt strong, beautifully strong, as are you, regardless... Love you my friend: Eddie
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re: Re: Last Sunset
Hi Sweet Wolf.......I kind of put everything in this one.....wrote emotions out as they came to thought......thank you for your honest thoughts here....and sweet words.....luving you too.....xo :)
Re: Last Sunset
6th Jul 2015 3:12am
Wow, scary territory this has you in, placing your heart somewhere where you know the outcome will not be pleasurable... and yet you have to because the now of it is so much that. A delicate ponder, but as most, it seems you are inclined to follow the pounding of the heart over the whispers of the mind.
Michael
Michael
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re: Re: Last Sunset
7th Jul 2015 10:02pm
Hey Michael.......luv your thoughts on this......I do tend to lean towards my heart than mind.....cause when I write....its the heart that makes more sense when all is confusing......thank you for your wonderful thinking words to me......xo :)
Re: Last Sunset
Anonymous
6th Jul 2015 3:34am
This is a journey from lust to erotic to love and then to uncertainty. All in the delicate voices that only you can bring

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re: Re: Last Sunset
7th Jul 2015 10:13pm
Awe SG.......I'm glad you caught the different emotions in this.....I luv a write that shows many sides of what a soul feels.....I'm actually fine....thank you for listening....xo :)
Re: Last Sunset
6th Jul 2015 5:33am
wow this one is absolutely beautiful and sexy... keep flowing that fire ink :)
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re: Re: Last Sunset
7th Jul 2015 10:17pm
Hey Magic.....you read what is not written......wasn't meaning this to be a complete sad write.......you're awesome...xo :)
Re: Last Sunset
6th Jul 2015 7:24am
very nicely done and brave of you to write it ,it gets a little sad at the end but very well done
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re: Re: Last Sunset
7th Jul 2015 10:18pm
Fear not my friend....I'm doing great.....just writing.....LOL!!! Thank you xo :)
Re: Last Sunset
Anonymous
6th Jul 2015 7:32am
Miss Flower. . .this is an outstanding piece!. . .Exceptionally and Vividly and Genuinely penned [from the heart]. . .must have!. . .xoxo, Devlin;)

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re: Re: Last Sunset
7th Jul 2015 10:21pm
Awe Dev......thank you my friend......I wrote this with several things in mind and souls......I'm actually doing great......honored by the RL add on......glad you liked xo :)
Re: Last Sunset
Very beautifully done as always my friend. I always miss reading you when I'm away. Wrote something for the first time in awhile. Hope you will read it when you get the chance..
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re: Re: Last Sunset
7th Jul 2015 10:25pm
......and I always miss you when you're away......thank you my sweet friend....always leave a smile behind on my page.. It would be my honior to read it......on my way to it.....xo :)
Re: Last Sunset
7th Jul 2015 10:05pm
Nothing ever really lasts, not in this world. Sounds like your seizing the day at least until "the next sunset falls." Excellent and beautiful write Flower!
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re: Re: Last Sunset
7th Jul 2015 10:27pm
I believe in hope Crow....just have learned that all things aren't what they seem......something's aren't revealed till the last sunset......I'm fine though so please don't worry......luv and hugs xo :)
Re: Last Sunset
10th Jul 2015 4:09am
Hi there. This is such a,beautiful piece. I have glanced at the other comments as I didn't really want to be influenced by them. I concur with one about how it starts off with wonderful love and the end there is an element of doubt and insecurity. This does not detract from the poem in any way and it makes me wonder if it will be ongoing.
Great stuff.! Your friend Philip. (WhatAboutMe)
Great stuff.! Your friend Philip. (WhatAboutMe)
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Hey there Philip......I luv when a write makes minds ponder.....LOL!!! Well.....what does "till the LAST sunset" mean to you.....it could go two ways.....it's all in how an individual feels it or reads it.....thank you for your interesting comment.....you've put a smile on page.....xo :)
Re: Last Sunset
10th Jul 2015 10:39am
Dear Flower Gurl
Can you permit me to assume the position of reference?
Oh words, I mean your words could just make one choke with gulps of blushes...
Awesome write
Can you permit me to assume the position of reference?
Oh words, I mean your words could just make one choke with gulps of blushes...
Awesome write
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re: Re: Last Sunset
11th Jul 2015 2:11am
My friend...you so flatter me......I'm smiling big time......thank you so much......you're such a sweetie....needed a lift tonight.....xo :)
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11th Jul 2015 8:26am
Re. Last Sunset
Anonymous
30th Jul 2015 4:58pm
Damn! This poem has so very many "great" lines and expressions it boggles the mind.
"don't need to speak words of love
I hear them in the whisper
of your breath as you moan" What in the world could be more expressive that these three lines?
"as we dance by night sounds " I so relate to this. Oh my yes, been there, you know, and done that.
"yet you say we are not close
my heart stumbles over its veins " My, my, I wasn't ready for these two lines. Took the wind out of me. Another definite "like," flowergirl.
"don't need to speak words of love
I hear them in the whisper
of your breath as you moan" What in the world could be more expressive that these three lines?
"as we dance by night sounds " I so relate to this. Oh my yes, been there, you know, and done that.
"yet you say we are not close
my heart stumbles over its veins " My, my, I wasn't ready for these two lines. Took the wind out of me. Another definite "like," flowergirl.

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Re: Re. Last Sunset
4th Aug 2015 4:15am
Well Scooter I pit it all out there in this one......just let the emotions take me wherever......I actually like writing different emotions in one write......brings the readers into my thoughts and feelings more.....they see all the angles of what I feel or think.....thank you for sharing such great thoughts in this one......xo :)
Re. Last Sunset
Anonymous
4th Aug 2015 3:05am
"you say we are not close." Couldn't fooled me, at least I think you though you were close.

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Re: Re. Last Sunset
4th Aug 2015 4:15am
I thought so..but it was one sided......thank you for that thought......xo :)