Awake in Lover's Dream

I found the different fonts a bit confusing and disjointing but that's just my personal take on it. And in line four of verse five you use the words 'abashed affection'. I think the word you are looking for is 'unabashed' since 'abashed' means shame or embarrassment and unabashed means without shame or embarrassment. Otherwise I thought it was a very sexy write with some excellent imagery. Good job!

Awesome critique, I must commend your brain, else that typo would have remained!

Grins on font..I am a sucker for the red (apologies to your eyes)

Truly- much thanks fer the read, lady!
~d

Aww..thankies Taryn! Love seein' you here ;)

Enjoyed your sweet comments- in smile, as always!
Be well lady poet..
~d

firstly, i love the different fonts and colours. i also have a personal fondness for abusing the ellipsis :D and various other entirely unnecessary forms of punctuation lol so yay for this piece!

"Slow screaming upon skin
Bodies collide in heated perfection
Becoming one meter, one rhyme"

^^^^
loved!!

Score one fer my font, I like you already!!

Most gracious thanks fer the read and kick-ass comments ;) *Much Appreciated.

huggs to ya!
~d

Poetic pleasures pulsating in passionate rhythm making heartbeats rhyme... Sensually divine!
jj

..and did I blind you too? (headcount fer font)lol.

Your verse of comment..? A-mazing, mista poet..How do you evoke the grins? ..just like that! *wink

Always thanx
and end on hug (fer your page-travels)
~d

The fonts were fine. I use a tablet and blow everything up big enough to see it due to my vision issues. [[hugs]] back at ya d!!!
jj

I thought this was absolutely breathless, and I too enjoyed the explosion of the different fonts!!! ^5 KatjA

Well written, well said and perfectly executed My love!!!
Write On Darksighs!!!!
Love Zazzles xoxox

Damn-skippy fer the font then (yay!)
*reminds herself not to bounce

eghem*..shake it off..
I SO knew you'd have my back m'sis *ty-ty

Thanks much fer the "breathless..you rock
the world *all over, lady!

loves ;)
~d