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Like ABC (part 2 of "To You")
To live until death
To die until forgotten
Carcass cradled in a casket
But your soul not rotten
To die until forgotten
Carcass cradled in a casket
But your soul not rotten
Published 12th Mar 2015
| Edited 29th Jul 2016
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13th Mar 2015 11:42am
This is a simple thought yet complicated too. That makes it intriguing. However, I'm not so sure It's wise to use the word 'forgotten' twice in so short a piece. Although to be perfectly honest I would rather see some honest repetition than a bad rhyme. Not a bad effort overall.
