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It's Hard To Forget
It's hard to forget you
with your clothes in little
fisted bundles on the floor.
Fuck, do I hate cigarettes, but
you wear their smoke so well, and
I even let you light up under my
sheets just so the second-hand might
keep you around a little longer. I
let you get away with a lot of things in
turn for my naivety. There you were,
facing the wall but facing me, crouched
to pounce with a cigarette between
your lips, perhaps to gas the taste
of me out. I fucked you like I fuck up:
hard and without a doubt, and you
took me all in for good measure. My
innocence was long lost, so you
took my subtlety. I honestly cannot
breathe cigarette fumes or even
look at a girl without feeling the long-
removed yearning you left me with. Easy
to remember, impossible to cut you
loose. I'll be thinking of you tonight,
rolling over and hoping my next breath is
filled with cancer.
Published 2nd Mar 2015
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3rd Mar 2015 1:37am
Very well written, GB, with sharp details such as "clothes in little fisted bundles on the floor " setting up the scene nicely. This reminds me of a gal I went with for about a month this past summer who smoked four packs of cigarettes a day. She could only sleep like an hour or two at night before lighting up. There were other issues but that relationship went up in smoke. Pun intended.
3rd Mar 2015 6:10pm
Thank you very much, Tony, this and "A Little After Twelve" are about the same girl. It's strange how even though it's a disgusting habit, there's something addicting about it when you're with someone that smokes, pun also intended.
3rd Mar 2015 5:40pm
WOW GB, this is so detailed, I can smell the smoke and your discontent too ...
Nice to meet you, Welcome to the underground!!
considered yourself stalked!
Zazzles :)
Nice to meet you, Welcome to the underground!!
considered yourself stalked!
Zazzles :)
3rd Mar 2015 6:35pm
4th Mar 2015 00:20am
they do stay in your head, those that make you wonder how you ever tangled up in the 1st place. so many incompatabilities, but they made an impact...
Anonymous
4th Mar 2015 00:53am
this is a very powerful piece. one full of memory and habits and ache. very well done.
13th Mar 2015 00:40am
Gorgeous piece, again. Your sensitivity to certain details and hidden vulnerability render your words heartbreaking. "I fucked you like I fuck up: / hard and without a doubt..." I love this line. Please keep writing. It would be a waste if you didn't.
