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Lure
Juxtaposed lovers covered.
Lanky, and high, romping
in the sheets like pin-ups
on walls.
His tactics were radioactive
as her form took shape.
Police tape stained the
coverlet, pooling at their
feet.
Lanky, and high, romping
in the sheets like pin-ups
on walls.
His tactics were radioactive
as her form took shape.
Police tape stained the
coverlet, pooling at their
feet.
Published 9th May 2011
| Edited 10th May 2011
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9th May 2011 6:03am
9th May 2011 6:08am
9th May 2011 6:17am
I liked the poem overall. Something that threw me out of it though was the separation of the word radio active. I don't know why exactly but it just stopped the poem for me so I had to re-read it. But that's just my two cents.
