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Time
Time has a way
Of always fleeting
Losing track of
Thing get left
Undone
Unspoken
Creating regrets
Forgiveness
Redemption can be found
In honor
Reverence
Solemn thought
The past is that
Gone
Never held again
The future
Life lies there
Of always fleeting
Losing track of
Thing get left
Undone
Unspoken
Creating regrets
Forgiveness
Redemption can be found
In honor
Reverence
Solemn thought
The past is that
Gone
Never held again
The future
Life lies there
Published 3rd Feb 2015
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3rd Feb 2015 2:59am
7th Mar 2015 4:54am
The use of "fleeting" as an active verb is interesting, as is the way you unconventionally sew common phrases together, like "Losing track of/Things get left/Undone". If you want your poetry to be memorable, however, you need to create striking images, or make use of poetic techniques like metaphor. Also, with lines as short as the ones here, you don't need to capitalise the first letter of each sentence. In fact, doing so only makes the poem look messy. Thank you for the read.
