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Remembering the Night Before
As I sat under the tree remembering the night before
I couldn't help but think of his fingers
And how they moved so slowly down my breast
Until he caressed my hard nipples.
The heat of the sun reminded me of the heat that took over,
As he filled my body with passion.
I couldn't help it,
The worst thing was that my melted ice cream,
Reminded me of how he came all over my naked body.
I'm going insane.
I must have him again.
Maybe I should wear my blue dress the next time I see him.
I couldn't help but think of his fingers
And how they moved so slowly down my breast
Until he caressed my hard nipples.
The heat of the sun reminded me of the heat that took over,
As he filled my body with passion.
I couldn't help it,
The worst thing was that my melted ice cream,
Reminded me of how he came all over my naked body.
I'm going insane.
I must have him again.
Maybe I should wear my blue dress the next time I see him.
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Re: Remembering the Night Before
11th Jan 2015 5:07am
I doubt the blue dress will make a difference. You sound hot no matter what. But what flavor was that ice cream?
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13th Jan 2015 6:39am
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Anonymous
13th Jan 2015 6:07pm
Very well done.. Really liked this piece..
Dave
Dave
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Re: Remembering the Night Before
19th Mar 2015 5:29pm
I enjoyed the honest of this piece.
The images added substance and the references to the ice cream, heat, etc. all activated my senses which added to the sensual and physical experience of reading the poem.
The images added substance and the references to the ice cream, heat, etc. all activated my senses which added to the sensual and physical experience of reading the poem.
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19th Mar 2015 7:53pm
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13th Apr 2015 3:36pm
Re. Remembering the Night Before
Your next poem after that would have made a good prequel to this poem, with the narrator revisiting the park in the light of the next day.
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