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wait
I will wait for my girl
the one thats meant to be
she is perfect
that's why I'm waiting
She said we can't be together
until a year
losing her
is my deepest fear
I fear I won't be perfect
for my perfect babe
I have a year to practice
while I wait
And as I wait
I am tempted
I will fight temptation
and will defeat it
I will face
loneliness and pain
I will always love her
I still wait
the one thats meant to be
she is perfect
that's why I'm waiting
She said we can't be together
until a year
losing her
is my deepest fear
I fear I won't be perfect
for my perfect babe
I have a year to practice
while I wait
And as I wait
I am tempted
I will fight temptation
and will defeat it
I will face
loneliness and pain
I will always love her
I still wait
Published 21st Apr 2011
| Edited 23rd Apr 2011
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Anonymous
21st Apr 2011 7:49am
I rate this 2/5 stars...this poem just lacks substance ;( and is full of spelling errors:
i fear i wont be perfect
for my perfect babe
i have a year to practice
while I wait
It may be an oversight....but you capitalize every other i/I don't get mad its good overall, I feel it needs more of something. Keep writing! I am just here to help ;)
i fear i wont be perfect
for my perfect babe
i have a year to practice
while I wait
It may be an oversight....but you capitalize every other i/I don't get mad its good overall, I feel it needs more of something. Keep writing! I am just here to help ;)
21st Apr 2011 12:00pm
21st Apr 2011 12:11pm
