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Falling
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I g o .
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Into my h o l e .
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Where I b e l o n g .
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I am not s t r o n g .
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Is how I f e e l .
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This can't be r e a l .
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I cannot l e a v e .
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I cannot b r e a t h e .
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Is where I s t a y .
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Until my last d a y .
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I g o .
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O
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Into my h o l e .
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O
W
N
Where I b e l o n g .
D
O
W
N
I am not s t r o n g .
D
O
W
N
Is how I f e e l .
D
O
W
N
This can't be r e a l .
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O
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N
I cannot l e a v e .
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O
W
N
I cannot b r e a t h e .
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O
W
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Is where I s t a y .
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O
W
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Until my last d a y .
Published 14th Oct 2014
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14th Oct 2014 8:29pm
Wow the form you used turned an ordinary sad poem into a powerful piece.
I really liked the form. Not everyone pulls that off but you did. Nice job!
I really liked the form. Not everyone pulls that off but you did. Nice job!
14th Oct 2014 8:43pm
Thank you, I tried to make it so the "Down" part staggered a little further to the right each time it was repeated but it was not working out right for me so I left it like this. :) I'm glad you like it.
