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A flower amongst flowers
A flower amongst flowers
Sure, I love to watch you
And to compare the beauty
You are the most beautiful
You like to smell one flower
To get drunk of its aroma
But it is me who becomes
Crazy, smelling your scent
And you nuzzle on another
To be sure it suits with smell
But I wish to taste your skin
So pure, so silky as a petal
Suddenly you get sleepy
Intoxicated by these flavors
And I am unable to move
Mesmerized by your beauty
(pics from Gabi, poem checked by Vee, music from "Chord Left", album "Aventime" by Agnes Obel)
Published 1st Sep 2014
| Edited 1st Oct 2014
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Anonymous
- Edited 2nd Sep 2014 00:31am
2nd Sep 2014 00:29am
Malin, this is a great milestone for you..imagine where you were a year ago?!
when I met you, the first poem i read was about sunflowers..yes i do remember ( i have a memory of an elephant :P) and look at you now exploring not only spoken word but creating visuals as well.
You have one exceptionally beautiful muse and this poem is absolutely fitting for Gabi..i really hope the best to you both :)
when I met you, the first poem i read was about sunflowers..yes i do remember ( i have a memory of an elephant :P) and look at you now exploring not only spoken word but creating visuals as well.
You have one exceptionally beautiful muse and this poem is absolutely fitting for Gabi..i really hope the best to you both :)
2nd Sep 2014 6:33am
Yes, I know, Vee, that with many supports like you had helped me to progress in English poetry and to impress my muse, so wonderful and so smart. Thank you for this help and the time you spend for that, I could not find better teacher!
2nd Sep 2014 2:03am
This is beautiful... Your voice adds a whole other level to an already eloquently scribed piece:)
2nd Sep 2014 6:35am
Anonymous
2nd Sep 2014 6:03pm
Really great job, Malin! It all flows very eloquently. :)
2nd Sep 2014 6:15pm
Oh, Madame!!! Proud you spend time to visit and to comment my poem. Thank you so much!
Anonymous
- Edited 6th Jan 2024 11:45pm
2nd Sep 2014 8:16pm
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2nd Sep 2014 8:28pm
Oh, thank you to be enjoyed by this poem, thank you for your visit and for your so nice comment, unholyunicorn! Really like it!
3rd Sep 2014 7:59pm
Malin, I like this poem a lot. Your style is so charming and tender, this poem is a single declaration of love to Gaby :-).
3rd Sep 2014 8:03pm
Oh, Mrs Chi, so nice comment! Thank you so much to spend time to read it and comment!
3rd Sep 2014 8:13pm
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