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tender submission
I want to know you in ways no one ever has
to hold your heart in tender submission
as I explore forbidden gardens
that grow in your dark
all that matters is how we feel
when we're alone between the sheets
as wordless communication pumps
clunky beats that flood
heart swollen throats
a meteoric sky-fire descent
behind adamantine bulwarks I fall
more in love with all you are
learning closely kept secrets
that make up your sweetness
I'm always left craving that fix
release yourself to me
do not fear my open arms
bare the scars that keep you
from being completely vulnerable;
I promise I'll still love you
to hold your heart in tender submission
as I explore forbidden gardens
that grow in your dark
all that matters is how we feel
when we're alone between the sheets
as wordless communication pumps
clunky beats that flood
heart swollen throats
a meteoric sky-fire descent
behind adamantine bulwarks I fall
more in love with all you are
learning closely kept secrets
that make up your sweetness
I'm always left craving that fix
release yourself to me
do not fear my open arms
bare the scars that keep you
from being completely vulnerable;
I promise I'll still love you
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Re: tender submission
17th Aug 2014 6:40pm
great work. love that shines on all the old scars & heartache, shines brighter...
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re: Re: tender submission
17th Aug 2014 9:56pm
Re: tender submission
17th Aug 2014 8:04pm
one thing i've always loved about your work is the honesty with which you write your feelings, darlin'
this is so beautiful xo
this is so beautiful xo
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re: Re: tender submission
The feeling is quite mutual about your work, love...
You're so beautiful to me, I'm glad you liked it...
You're so beautiful to me, I'm glad you liked it...
Re: tender submission
17th Aug 2014 10:01pm
re: Re: tender submission
17th Aug 2014 10:55pm
Thanks Reita, I do overdo the description at times I guess. Thanks for the visit... :)
Re: tender submission
17th Aug 2014 10:27pm
Fireglacier, luv :-* ~
This poem is lovely and tender, breathtaking in its simplicity and your stark, sincere declarations. You have such a way with words, luv. :-*
This poem is lovely and tender, breathtaking in its simplicity and your stark, sincere declarations. You have such a way with words, luv. :-*
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17th Aug 2014 10:57pm
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19th Aug 2014 10:24pm
Thanks a lot Rain for the visit, and kind words. Nice to see you back as well... :)
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21st Aug 2014 11:19pm
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re: Re: tender submission
21st Aug 2014 11:50pm
To me the perfect women accepts myself as I do her, unconditionally, and she gives me that, yes...
no one is perfect, its whether they're perfect for you..
Thanks jack... :)
no one is perfect, its whether they're perfect for you..
Thanks jack... :)
Re: tender submission
Anonymous
13th Sep 2014 2:14am
Once again I find myself speechless after reading such beauty and luv. Enjoyed! Xo :)
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re: Re: tender submission
13th Sep 2014 2:17am
Well thank you again for reading, and making such a kind comment, Flower...
Re: tender submission
27th Dec 2014 3:18am
Gorgeous and passionate, such tender yet erotic language. Thanks for sharing, Fenom. :)
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27th Dec 2014 7:18am
Re. tender submission
9th Nov 2015 3:23am
Interesting read... Understanding appropriate use of terms will give you a finer sense of clarity. That & which... When & how to use either. Keep Grindin CAOS737
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Re: Re. tender submission
8th Aug 2017 6:24am
Thanks so much for your advice. I'd really appreciate a more detailed critique. I look forward to constructive feedback unlike many... I can take it... :)