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'Exodus of Joy...'
Decrepit desolation
of the soul has taken place
besieged by your going away
is a reality I can't face...
Akin to the dissipation
of smoke in open sky
joy now had gone,
no mention of why
Now, lost inside
myself I die
why, why,why!?
throughout days
n' nights I cry
you knew not how I flied
It seems you never saw...
how your light gave me wings
that sweet love made me sing
Now empty, this dark is devastating
can't heal, I feel I lost my everything
Never meant to vent this fucking pain
but without you i'm slowly going insane
Decrepit desolation
of the soul has taken place
besieged by your going away
is a reality I can't face.
of the soul has taken place
besieged by your going away
is a reality I can't face...
Akin to the dissipation
of smoke in open sky
joy now had gone,
no mention of why
Now, lost inside
myself I die
why, why,why!?
throughout days
n' nights I cry
you knew not how I flied
It seems you never saw...
how your light gave me wings
that sweet love made me sing
Now empty, this dark is devastating
can't heal, I feel I lost my everything
Never meant to vent this fucking pain
but without you i'm slowly going insane
Decrepit desolation
of the soul has taken place
besieged by your going away
is a reality I can't face.
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Re: 'Exodus of Joy...'
11th Aug 2014 2:18pm
re: Re: 'Exodus of Joy...'
11th Aug 2014 2:24pm
Your comment is deeply poetic, mind if I 'steal' ur term
"Finding shadows on a moonless night?" It's
truly inspiring :)... N thank you my beautiful Mami :)
"Finding shadows on a moonless night?" It's
truly inspiring :)... N thank you my beautiful Mami :)
Re: 'Exodus of Joy...'
11th Aug 2014 4:01pm
pain of a soul left without breaths
of the one love that made feathers
span and lift
eyes closed
never losing site
why must you now look
eyes opened wide
to a world I only see
through crying eyes
Love is borrowed my friend, you must fight for it or wait for it to came back again. I have battled these scars and can only offer that you are truly a loving being, one cannot feel such pain if not in tune with feelings.
incredible write, making such pain beautiful
thanks for sharing
of the one love that made feathers
span and lift
eyes closed
never losing site
why must you now look
eyes opened wide
to a world I only see
through crying eyes
Love is borrowed my friend, you must fight for it or wait for it to came back again. I have battled these scars and can only offer that you are truly a loving being, one cannot feel such pain if not in tune with feelings.
incredible write, making such pain beautiful
thanks for sharing
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re: Re: 'Exodus of Joy...'
11th Aug 2014 6:16pm
Can't disagree with a thing you said bro... So honored
by your support... :)
by your support... :)
Re: 'Exodus of Joy...'
Anonymous
11th Aug 2014 5:02pm
The poem is very bare, It has just the right balance of dark and light, of vulnerable honest emotions and a raw veil.
Great write!
Great write!
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re: Re: 'Exodus of Joy...'
11th Aug 2014 6:22pm
Hi sweetheart, yea I guess it is... Truly appreciate your
sweet support, I appreciate it :)
sweet support, I appreciate it :)
Re: 'Exodus of Joy...'
11th Aug 2014 6:58pm
re: Re: 'Exodus of Joy...'
11th Aug 2014 7:43pm
Thank u my sweet one, yea I'm not sure how
to explain that kinda pain but it never felt beautiful
to me lol... Still I get u, n thank u so much :)
to explain that kinda pain but it never felt beautiful
to me lol... Still I get u, n thank u so much :)
Re: 'Exodus of Joy...'
11th Aug 2014 10:24pm
aahh...you've done it again PM...
had me there with you experiencing the pain....
you're an amazing poet.... :) x
had me there with you experiencing the pain....
you're an amazing poet.... :) x
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re: Re: 'Exodus of Joy...'
11th Aug 2014 11:47pm
Ur an amazing supporter my dear! Thank you sooooo
much :) truly appreciate it
much :) truly appreciate it
Re: 'Exodus of Joy...'
12th Aug 2014 2:11am
Excellent Heartfelt Expression Poetik...
fav line:
"It seems you never saw...
how your light gave me wings" beautiful and bittersweet
fav line:
"It seems you never saw...
how your light gave me wings" beautiful and bittersweet
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re: Re: 'Exodus of Joy...'
12th Aug 2014 5:19am
Thank you my sweet sweet beauty, I'm flattered n honored
Truly appreciate your support :)
Truly appreciate your support :)
Re: 'Exodus of Joy...'
12th Aug 2014 5:56am
Like shadow boxing in a dark cave!!LOL!!!
Great write!!!
Awesome read Bro. PK!!
Love the style in that pen!!
Sir Lancelott
Great write!!!
Awesome read Bro. PK!!
Love the style in that pen!!
Sir Lancelott
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re: Re: 'Exodus of Joy...'
12th Aug 2014 11:50am
Lmao wow THAT was funny! Thanks a bunch for the laugh bro. N the support always :)
Re: 'Exodus of Joy...'
Anonymous
27th Aug 2014 4:05pm
Good stuff poet, excited to read more.... little daunted tho haha. You are quite the prolific one
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re: Re: 'Exodus of Joy...'
27th Aug 2014 4:24pm
Aaaawwww I thank u kindly! Truly appreciate ur
praise JT n I will be by ur pages ASAP :)
praise JT n I will be by ur pages ASAP :)
Re. 'Exodus of Joy...'
15th Jun 2016 11:51pm
"Akin to the dissipation
of smoke in open sky
joy now had gone,
no mention of why"
Absolutely perfectly penned. You are a true master with your pen, sir. Hand over heart, I swear...I will be keeping an eye on you... :)
Willow
of smoke in open sky
joy now had gone,
no mention of why"
Absolutely perfectly penned. You are a true master with your pen, sir. Hand over heart, I swear...I will be keeping an eye on you... :)
Willow
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Re: Re. 'Exodus of Joy...'
16th Jun 2016 9:41am
Aaawww...that moves me deeply. Thank you, for all the support you've given my ink, I'm indebted :)
Re: Re. 'Exodus of Joy...'
16th Jun 2016 9:46am
You owe no one anything. We owe you gratitude for sharing what you have tucked away in you. ☺
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