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crossing over
Existence
Is worthless
Enter doubt
A fresh start is around the corner
Gun enters mouth
Drop this blade
Bang
Sad tears won't help
under omen stars
cliffs and mountains no longer overcomed
it could be a leap of faith
death nothing to be feared but
Embraced
Hang
Living is foulest evil
Life is the only wrong
Stare toward the horizon
Being this high up ,feels nostalgic
Closer to God hood
Fall to rise
Jump
Is worthless
Enter doubt
A fresh start is around the corner
Gun enters mouth
Drop this blade
Bang
Sad tears won't help
under omen stars
cliffs and mountains no longer overcomed
it could be a leap of faith
death nothing to be feared but
Embraced
Hang
Living is foulest evil
Life is the only wrong
Stare toward the horizon
Being this high up ,feels nostalgic
Closer to God hood
Fall to rise
Jump
Published 10th Jul 2014
| Edited 15th Oct 2014
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10th Jul 2014 8:23pm
Nice write, really like the finale, "fall to rise, jump" has a pretty strong feel to it
Sums up how the situation can feel in the final Moments, slightly empowering to some extent,
The only thing I did notice, is with the second
Stanza, were you trying to spell suicide down it?
Nitpicking I know but it's something to critic.
Be Happy
Sums up how the situation can feel in the final Moments, slightly empowering to some extent,
The only thing I did notice, is with the second
Stanza, were you trying to spell suicide down it?
Nitpicking I know but it's something to critic.
Be Happy
11th Jul 2014 3:38am
