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my friend
Your my friend
my acward young friend
you make me smile
when I see you grow
when you are not hurting yourself
but like most people I care about
I hurt you
I ment to give you something you never had
but instead I took something from you
I'm sorry my friend
I lost something too
my acward young friend
you make me smile
when I see you grow
when you are not hurting yourself
but like most people I care about
I hurt you
I ment to give you something you never had
but instead I took something from you
I'm sorry my friend
I lost something too
Published 10th Jul 2014
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11th Jul 2014 3:18pm
Other than a few minor spelling issues, nothing serious. This is almost tragic, can feel a separation/loss of good friendship really potently. Has a childlike yearning to it, innocent maybe, but shrouded in loss, or even regret.
Enjoyably simple.
Be Happy
Enjoyably simple.
Be Happy
15th Jul 2014 7:54am
Aw, this is cute in a very sad way. Like A_ said, fix the spelling and grammar and this could be a nice short little diamond in the rough :D
24th Jul 2014 3:18am
It is tragic indeed. I can't imagine life being so bad that I could cut myself!
Fuck that shit I'm cuttin Nigga's instead not the other way around! Great courage to write this.
I hope you can forgive yourself first my darlin'
always
Broomie
Fuck that shit I'm cuttin Nigga's instead not the other way around! Great courage to write this.
I hope you can forgive yourself first my darlin'
always
Broomie
28th Nov 2014 5:28am
I like this it kind of says teenage romance in the I lost something to line, but thats my interpretation.
