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Blood Stained
For a while it eases my agonizing pain
But the memories sadly still remain.
It haunts me every night and day
I doubt it will ever go away.
I'm alone now with my brand new knife
Thinking about taking my pitiful life.
Then more and more I start to lean back
Until I fall into the swirling clouds as my world goes black.
Minutes, then hours go by before I awake
I look at my arm and see my huge mistake.
Now I try and cover it up with my shirt
To cover the stripes, the blood, and all the hurt.
My white shirt is now soaked red and stained
Feels like half of my body and soul has been drained.
The battle wages on and on, it never ends
Through my burning pain I'll lose my angel and friends.
They won't hear my cries for help, my ever fading screams
As more of my blood slowly drips and streams.
And now my pain and fears push her away from me
I fear that one day she'll be gone and alone is all I'll be.
Broken and torn I'll be left in the rain
Trembling on my knees cause I just can't take the pain.
But the memories sadly still remain.
It haunts me every night and day
I doubt it will ever go away.
I'm alone now with my brand new knife
Thinking about taking my pitiful life.
Then more and more I start to lean back
Until I fall into the swirling clouds as my world goes black.
Minutes, then hours go by before I awake
I look at my arm and see my huge mistake.
Now I try and cover it up with my shirt
To cover the stripes, the blood, and all the hurt.
My white shirt is now soaked red and stained
Feels like half of my body and soul has been drained.
The battle wages on and on, it never ends
Through my burning pain I'll lose my angel and friends.
They won't hear my cries for help, my ever fading screams
As more of my blood slowly drips and streams.
And now my pain and fears push her away from me
I fear that one day she'll be gone and alone is all I'll be.
Broken and torn I'll be left in the rain
Trembling on my knees cause I just can't take the pain.
Written by
cjmshadow
(Poetic Joker)
Published 2nd Apr 2011
| Edited 1st Feb 2020
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2nd Apr 2011 3:08pm
all comments are totally welcome. i like writing poetry and have many more. i just need to find them. many are similar to this one. criticism is welcome
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8th Apr 2011 10:59pm
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15th Apr 2011 9:31pm
thank you :) i wish i had my folder with all my old poems so i could post them. :( oh well i'll justmake more lol. i may not always make the best poems, but it's something i love to do with a passion
deep
22nd Apr 2011 9:03pm
i oved the way you madeit sound as though you an lose your soul through one little slit or even hundreds very deep
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22nd Apr 2011 11:01pm
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23rd Apr 2011 2:48am
amazing i love it!! i can feel where your coming from and that makes it all the more special keep it up love
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Good Work
27th Apr 2011 2:01am
I have had a terrible life and I regret to say I have cut but the way you involve it in your writing its seems to be how you let go and get by.
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27th Apr 2011 11:16am
i'm sorry you've had a bad life. and i try to get it out more in writing than cutting that is true. however lately, the fresh scars on my arm and wrists seem to be growing...
wow
7th May 2011 12:07pm
wow thats deep, sad, and painful I love it!; but sorry you feel this way.
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7th May 2011 12:10pm
thank you. and i no longer do. if you read my poem "you lost" that's the best way i feel now. it's my favorite poem besides "death in dreams"
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8th May 2011 2:01am
this guy and i have gone through alot he is like my twin weve both seen the hard pain and its been pretty damn close to bein the same some has been the same all his poems are deep they have so much meaning. he is the one guy who not only helps me through my pain but is always there for me no matter where we are at. thanks bro
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8th May 2011 6:21pm
that's what brothers are for bro. thanks to you too for bein there for me too.
deep..
8th May 2011 4:42pm
this poem describes such feelings i cannot begin to explain..do to the so much alike commonarity i have to this as well... well done man..well done
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Anonymous
8th May 2011 5:44pm
*Thinking about taking
*My white shirt
*Soul is drained
This is majorly cliche. There isn't really a line that stands out to me that says "I'm original and interesting". Yes, we all have problems, and yes, this is easily related to, but there are a thousand other poems like it. My question is; what do all of the people who commented above me see in this?
*My white shirt
*Soul is drained
This is majorly cliche. There isn't really a line that stands out to me that says "I'm original and interesting". Yes, we all have problems, and yes, this is easily related to, but there are a thousand other poems like it. My question is; what do all of the people who commented above me see in this?
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8th May 2011 6:08pm
tell me Cori, do you criticize every poem that doesn't stand out to you? or just mine? every poem is different because it comes from each person with different emotions. do you relate to this poem at all? if you do, maybe try focusing on the meaning behind these words, not just how the words sound.
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8th May 2011 7:22pm
I actually don't have much time for commenting on poems on here, but was absentmindedly looking on the list of "Popular Poems (in the last 30 days)" and stumbled upon this. (Did you know it's quite high up there?) And I see you haven't corrected the typos.
Plus, if you had clicked the option for "Friendly feedback", I most likely wouldn't have commented at all.
If you think that I'm singling you out, then you're very wrong.
And, yes. It's true that we all have different emotions, but wouldn't you say that they all fall under the general umbrella of standard emotions? (i.e. Sad, scared, regretful, hurt, angry).
The underlying meaning isn't hard to see, as it's almost nonexistent. The words are so blatantly put out there that it leaves no room for the reader to interpret.
Plus, poetry is also about how the words sound, as well as the "meaning behind the words". Though, personally I feel that morals and lessons behind writing don't work unless you're in elementary school or Aesop.
Plus, if you had clicked the option for "Friendly feedback", I most likely wouldn't have commented at all.
If you think that I'm singling you out, then you're very wrong.
And, yes. It's true that we all have different emotions, but wouldn't you say that they all fall under the general umbrella of standard emotions? (i.e. Sad, scared, regretful, hurt, angry).
The underlying meaning isn't hard to see, as it's almost nonexistent. The words are so blatantly put out there that it leaves no room for the reader to interpret.
Plus, poetry is also about how the words sound, as well as the "meaning behind the words". Though, personally I feel that morals and lessons behind writing don't work unless you're in elementary school or Aesop.
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9th May 2011 5:57pm
yeah kinda bugs the sh*t outa me too man, and it isnt even my poem. i hate when people always have to battle and be rude or pricks to one another when we're just trying to fill out our feelins through poetry.. its poetry not a spelling contest or justa contest in general. we escape our feelings through this, its where we try to get away from reality just for a small amount of time..well its how i do. but keep writing man f**k up every line of spelling if you want to, i'll still read every poem and put honest positive critiqe on it.and i think i spelt that wrong but im fine with it. keep it up buddy, ur doing great:)
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9th May 2011 11:13pm
the reader doesn't need to interpret this poem. it says it all quite plainly yes, and clearly. perhaps that's why people like it...because they can all relate and it shouts the meaning very plainly. it just is there, and people can see that and feel it. if you want to see something that is "different" or "not original" then read ABC's. that is also on the "popular list (30 days). it's actually ahead of bloodstained. that is different.
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22nd Feb 2012 5:25pm
I agree, isent that why were here? To let out the things you can't say through the art of poetry. Nothing new for you to hear, but I did relate to this all to well. I think your a great poet hun and I like what you have to say
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22nd Feb 2012 5:40pm
Thank you kourtnissixxx :) I'm sorry you had to relate. That's quite kind of you:)
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22nd Feb 2012 5:49pm
Nothing to be sorry about, after all, its our experiences that help mold us into the people we become
Just speaking my mind, anytime
Just speaking my mind, anytime
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