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Close - Senryu
Damp skin close to mine
Conjunct like siamese twins
Inhaling our scents
Written for the 'Eye Candy' (women's comp) competition hosted by DevlinDLC
Conjunct like siamese twins
Inhaling our scents
Written for the 'Eye Candy' (women's comp) competition hosted by DevlinDLC
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re: Re: Close - Senryu
Re: Close - Senryu
12th Jun 2014 8:52pm
re: Re: Close - Senryu
12th Jun 2014 9:19pm
Re: Close - Senryu
12th Jun 2014 9:53pm
That's very close Miss Chi
So sensual!
Good luck in the Comp mamacita!
So sensual!
Good luck in the Comp mamacita!
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re: Re: Close - Senryu
Re: Close - Senryu
12th Jun 2014 11:21pm
it creates a great image,
Chi, more like a living
sculpture than a painting,
more alive...
Chi, more like a living
sculpture than a painting,
more alive...
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re: Re: Close - Senryu
I like what you said about this poem,
the living sculpture, that is to say,since
I can picture them, too.
It's perhaps because
something has come to life again...
the living sculpture, that is to say,since
I can picture them, too.
It's perhaps because
something has come to life again...
Re: Close - Senryu
13th Jun 2014 00:22am
re: Re: Close - Senryu
13th Jun 2014 8:10pm
Re: Close - Senryu
13th Jun 2014 4:00am
Please come to my Haiku Erotic Restaurant. You and your husband would be most welcome there; feel free to circulate, if so inclined. Couples get VERY close there, just like in your Senryu. I liked this poem.
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re: Re: Close - Senryu
13th Jun 2014 8:13pm
You flatter me, candycrier. I will surely come to your 'Restaurant' for a bite :-).
Re: Close - Senryu
14th Jun 2014 7:39am
re: Re: Close - Senryu
23rd Jun 2014 8:06pm
Thank you so much, dear Sara! You humble me with your words. You know how much I love your work!