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Falling Apart
As the sun goes down
Every part of me is falling apart
Needing someone, needing you to comforts me
Telling me that everything will be fine
When you know, I know when its not
Its never the same when you're here
The days gotten darker
The more you went away
The more I began to think
Your no longer here with me
But your soul may still remain
I may not be as important to you
As you are to me
Published 24th May 2014
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Exceedingly blunt in the last two lines. Very blunt throughout. I'm sorry, I'm not good with love poems, generally. --But I know what it is to need...Yes, laugh, or make some funny face at that...
Something instinctive tells me to suggest that you might like to read some of Joseph Goosey's writing--er..."We, the Institutionalized" to be more precise, though I'm not really sure why...anyway, he's a riveting poet in some of the ways you've been so far, and you might find the free(last I checked) book I just mentioned interesting, anyway. Really. I did the summer before last.
Something instinctive tells me to suggest that you might like to read some of Joseph Goosey's writing--er..."We, the Institutionalized" to be more precise, though I'm not really sure why...anyway, he's a riveting poet in some of the ways you've been so far, and you might find the free(last I checked) book I just mentioned interesting, anyway. Really. I did the summer before last.
