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At War With My Heart
Caught in the middle of
Passion and stability.
In between doing what's right
And what feels good to me.
With one, I'm safe
The other, I'm free.
Should I hide my true self
Just to live comfortably?
One can't be so blind
To our overwhelming chemistry.
I willingly bare my soul
Every time you enter me.
But I need him too,
He is a part of me.
At war with my heart,
My feelings betray me.
I know I need to pick one,
Before this lust consumes me.
Passion and stability.
In between doing what's right
And what feels good to me.
With one, I'm safe
The other, I'm free.
Should I hide my true self
Just to live comfortably?
One can't be so blind
To our overwhelming chemistry.
I willingly bare my soul
Every time you enter me.
But I need him too,
He is a part of me.
At war with my heart,
My feelings betray me.
I know I need to pick one,
Before this lust consumes me.
Published 1st May 2014
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1st May 2014 2:49am
1st May 2014 4:19am
I really liked this poem, it tackles a problem that we girls often have to deal with at some point--which guy is the right choice? I especially liked "With one, I'm safe, The other, I'm free." and the two preceding lines. It was a very catchy part of the poem that clearly illustrates your dilemma.
This is a solid poem that largely avoids the common, more cheesy pitfalls I often see in love poetry...right up until the last line where it falls apart. I encourage you to find a stronger last line that will pack more of a punch.
This is a solid poem that largely avoids the common, more cheesy pitfalls I often see in love poetry...right up until the last line where it falls apart. I encourage you to find a stronger last line that will pack more of a punch.
1st May 2014 11:33am
2nd May 2014 00:45am
Ms. Lioness, that was Beautiful!!!
Don't change a thing, the last line was perfect for this piece!!!
Love the write and read!!!
Sir Lancelott
Don't change a thing, the last line was perfect for this piece!!!
Love the write and read!!!
Sir Lancelott
2nd May 2014 3:11pm
21st Sep 2023 1:48am
👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏!! Extremely excellent ♥ may the best man win is how 🤔 I see it,
Choices can be hard to make when 🤔 you at a stalemate to the Victor I'm sure the spoils will be great 👍!!
Please 🙏 keep on writing ✍ ok queen 👸 peace ✌ and blessings 🙏 always 💖
Choices can be hard to make when 🤔 you at a stalemate to the Victor I'm sure the spoils will be great 👍!!
Please 🙏 keep on writing ✍ ok queen 👸 peace ✌ and blessings 🙏 always 💖
