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my neck hurts
Tossing and turning
I lie awake
My synapses burning,
I struggle to drift
Against the current of an icy river
With a broken paddle and a wet piece of bread
I contemplate all that I've ever done and all I've ever said.
My tumbling thoughts are creating a rift
Between sanity, sleep
And my mind which roams free
I sense that my train of thought is a submarine
And its dived down too deep
No turning back now
I'm just an uncomfortable heap.
I'm consumed by my chaos
My joys and mistakes
Motherfucker,
I need sleep,
For fucksakes!
I lie awake
My synapses burning,
I struggle to drift
Against the current of an icy river
With a broken paddle and a wet piece of bread
I contemplate all that I've ever done and all I've ever said.
My tumbling thoughts are creating a rift
Between sanity, sleep
And my mind which roams free
I sense that my train of thought is a submarine
And its dived down too deep
No turning back now
I'm just an uncomfortable heap.
I'm consumed by my chaos
My joys and mistakes
Motherfucker,
I need sleep,
For fucksakes!
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Re: my neck hurts
27th Apr 2014 11:38pm
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28th Apr 2014 10:44am
Re: my neck hurts
29th Apr 2014 3:51am
That submarine line was top notch.
I enjoyed this piece a lot, I think a lot of people can relate to those long, endless nights of waking chaos.
I enjoyed this piece a lot, I think a lot of people can relate to those long, endless nights of waking chaos.
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re: Re: my neck hurts
29th Apr 2014 4:14am
Re: my neck hurts
29th Apr 2014 4:20am
Awesome write and read Ms. H.Q!!
You ink very well sweets!!!
Sir Lancelott
visit sometime
You ink very well sweets!!!
Sir Lancelott
visit sometime
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re: Re: my neck hurts
29th Apr 2014 4:50am
Re: my neck hurts
30th Apr 2014 7:09am
I hate nights like that ... Having one now in fact so this was truly a great gem to find ... I love the flow of metaphors in this - the weight of them "train" and "submarine" adds to the gravity of the ink
... Cheers!
... Cheers!
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re: Re: my neck hurts
30th Apr 2014 10:25am
Thank you LSP
I'm glad it found you at such an oppertune moment.
And thank you for commenting so thoroughly, its refreshing to know with certainty that it was actually read[lol]
Xx
I'm glad it found you at such an oppertune moment.
And thank you for commenting so thoroughly, its refreshing to know with certainty that it was actually read[lol]
Xx
Re: my neck hurts
19th May 2014 9:34am
I hate the pain in the neck for which the works I'd made. Beautiful write HarleyQuinn
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re: Re: my neck hurts
20th May 2014 9:35am
Re: my neck hurts
Anonymous
28th May 2014 2:38pm
I enjoyed this.feel the passion in it and relate all too well
insomnia and I are not strangers for many reasons.
well done :)
insomnia and I are not strangers for many reasons.
well done :)
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29th May 2014 10:41am