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For want of a better word
Take all of my poems,
past, present and future.
Take my words
and how I string them together
to put a smile on your face
or worry in your heart.
Take this physique
that I have built.
Take these ideas
that I form,
the books I've read,
the music I've heard
the love I've made.
Take it all.
You could take it all,
if you'd only give me
your peace.
past, present and future.
Take my words
and how I string them together
to put a smile on your face
or worry in your heart.
Take this physique
that I have built.
Take these ideas
that I form,
the books I've read,
the music I've heard
the love I've made.
Take it all.
You could take it all,
if you'd only give me
your peace.
Published 27th Apr 2014
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27th Apr 2014 1:58pm
a rage that builds to silence, piece by piece - cool writings and few better words
27th Apr 2014 4:59pm
you needn't give away any of this things if I had peace I would gladly share.. great write.. with respect Crim
27th Apr 2014 6:12pm
Is that even possible, for anyone to give?
I'm left to ponder "is finding it the only way to have it"
I'm left to ponder "is finding it the only way to have it"
27th Apr 2014 9:18pm
see... the moment of desperation asks for an answer that doesn't exist, but the brain takes us there when we are in need. Or when we think we are in need! Truth be told; peace is our own responsibility.
Peace is overrated and in fact, non existent. Live the insanity as best as you can.
Now, the poem doesn't scream Panama for some reason. The words are there but are slightly redundant. As I worked my way through the sentences I felt that the meaning was simple and brilliant but easily given. There must be a trap/trick somewhere. But where? Excuse my rant; you haven't been the easiest writer, that's all.
Now, the poem doesn't scream Panama for some reason. The words are there but are slightly redundant. As I worked my way through the sentences I felt that the meaning was simple and brilliant but easily given. There must be a trap/trick somewhere. But where? Excuse my rant; you haven't been the easiest writer, that's all.
8th May 2014 6:50pm
Asked myself that at times in my life Panama. I’ve fucked my peace away many times through the retarded decisions I’ve made. Nice write brother!
27th Jul 2014 00:14am
This one struck home, for me. Peace, should be so simple; reclusion buys peace (of sorts), but oh the price. Cheers for this piece, CruelHandWriter
