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push me
electrical surge
current pinging my fingertips
punching my gut
it tumbles through
on alert, i'm sharper
quicker
i can hear a bug
scuttling in the tub from here
and i'm confident
i can do anything i want with this
energy
pumping
pressing the edges of my conscious
mind
overcoming usual hurdles because
i can
wish it didn't take a rush
to get me ready
steady enough to just
jump
current pinging my fingertips
punching my gut
it tumbles through
on alert, i'm sharper
quicker
i can hear a bug
scuttling in the tub from here
and i'm confident
i can do anything i want with this
energy
pumping
pressing the edges of my conscious
mind
overcoming usual hurdles because
i can
wish it didn't take a rush
to get me ready
steady enough to just
jump
Published 16th Mar 2011
| Edited 17th Mar 2011
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Anonymous
16th Mar 2011 5:01pm
I enjoy poems like this, which create mini epics out of the most mundane subject matter. An elegantly crafted, considered piece. The first verse is my favourite.
aw, thanks, Jack. it really is the most mundane thing, especially since the energy is probably from one too many cups of tea. can't deny the invigorating effects though. [:
16th Mar 2011 6:20pm
"ONE" to many cups, lol
Wish a cup of Tetley would give me a rush like that.. :o)
Wish a cup of Tetley would give me a rush like that.. :o)
16th Mar 2011 7:12pm
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18th Mar 2011 1:11pm
18th Mar 2011 2:29pm
makes me wanna drink coffee!
(but I can't though, I just had my 5th cup.)
I liked this.
and this:
'wish it didn't take a rush
to get me ready
steady enough to just
jump' --it resonates, haha. Nice job, doll!
(but I can't though, I just had my 5th cup.)
I liked this.
and this:
'wish it didn't take a rush
to get me ready
steady enough to just
jump' --it resonates, haha. Nice job, doll!
18th Mar 2011 2:34pm
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12th Apr 2011 10:23am
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12th Apr 2011 10:25am
28th Dec 2011 9:27pm
Makes me feel like taking something...
But also to make me stop
Amazingly written
But also to make me stop
Amazingly written
29th Dec 2011 10:18am
18th Dec 2012 11:00pm
Both your pic (you holding a mug) and the verse complement the sense the reader gets of the delights of a caffeine drink.
19th Dec 2012 1:49am
