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Mother Nature
The sound of the birds
The feel of the wind
The sight of the green
And the beauty within.
She caresses us in her light gestures
She soothes us with her soft whispers
She amazes us with her unique creations
And her gentle soul.
She takes us by the hand
And teaches the way of life.
She helps us in many ways
Though we may strife.
Don't be fooled by her beauty
Don't be fooled by her purity
Nor her kind heart
For it is her duty.
Her creations can be morbid
Her sounds can be distorted
Her happenings can be horrid
But, in all good, there is bad.
She is known as mother nature
She helps us survive this life
She is our creator
We must respect her for she is also the detonator.
Everyone, please, I would love some honest opinions and I would appreciate it if you would NOT take this poem for any purpose without my permission and citing it or quoting it. Thank you (:
The feel of the wind
The sight of the green
And the beauty within.
She caresses us in her light gestures
She soothes us with her soft whispers
She amazes us with her unique creations
And her gentle soul.
She takes us by the hand
And teaches the way of life.
She helps us in many ways
Though we may strife.
Don't be fooled by her beauty
Don't be fooled by her purity
Nor her kind heart
For it is her duty.
Her creations can be morbid
Her sounds can be distorted
Her happenings can be horrid
But, in all good, there is bad.
She is known as mother nature
She helps us survive this life
She is our creator
We must respect her for she is also the detonator.
Everyone, please, I would love some honest opinions and I would appreciate it if you would NOT take this poem for any purpose without my permission and citing it or quoting it. Thank you (:
Published 14th Apr 2014
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Anonymous
14th Apr 2014 00:17am
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14th Apr 2014 00:21am
Thank you very much for being honest, I do appreciate it.
This is definitely not my best but I am also new to poetry.
Next time, I will definitely try better.
Again, thank you.
This is definitely not my best but I am also new to poetry.
Next time, I will definitely try better.
Again, thank you.
14th Apr 2014 00:27am
just a couple of things, and you
must bear in mind that I'm English
and sometimes American English
catches me out, but "though we
may strife" sounds wrong to my
ears, as I would hear "though we
may strive..."
it is very hard to make a poem
flow, sometimes one doesn't want
it to, but I'm not sure of your
intention here...
but then I'm no expert, and there
are some very good lines here and I wish
you well, and welcome..:)
must bear in mind that I'm English
and sometimes American English
catches me out, but "though we
may strife" sounds wrong to my
ears, as I would hear "though we
may strive..."
it is very hard to make a poem
flow, sometimes one doesn't want
it to, but I'm not sure of your
intention here...
but then I'm no expert, and there
are some very good lines here and I wish
you well, and welcome..:)
14th Apr 2014 00:37am
Strife and strive are two completely different words.
I do realize that this doesn't flow the way I wanted it to or thought it would. I'm not one to re-read anything so I just went with it and submitted it.
Thank you very much for your honestly and the welcoming.
I do realize that this doesn't flow the way I wanted it to or thought it would. I'm not one to re-read anything so I just went with it and submitted it.
Thank you very much for your honestly and the welcoming.
14th Apr 2014 00:45am
Oh I am aware they have very
different meanings, but yours
was not clear...one may suffer
strife, or live with strife, or
whatever, but one does not strife...
different meanings, but yours
was not clear...one may suffer
strife, or live with strife, or
whatever, but one does not strife...
14th Apr 2014 00:57am
I believe we may have different ideas of the word strife.
Strife is a simple disagreement or conflict formed by an issue.
Strife is a simple disagreement or conflict formed by an issue.
14th Apr 2014 1:11am
well I will not labour the point,
strife can certainly be caused
by a disagreement or a conflict,
but still one does not strife..! one
suffers or feels strife...it's simply
a matter of sentence construction.
although, as I earlier pointed out,
we do speak different forms of the
same language..:)
strife can certainly be caused
by a disagreement or a conflict,
but still one does not strife..! one
suffers or feels strife...it's simply
a matter of sentence construction.
although, as I earlier pointed out,
we do speak different forms of the
same language..:)
14th Apr 2014 1:20am
Indeed we do speak different forms of the same language. I do understand what you are saying so next time, I will pay more attention to the words I use along with the context they are used in.
14th Apr 2014 1:29am
I think I shall enjoy reading you...
and I really meant the welcome
to D.U. (and anyway I'm rubbish..:)
good luck with it all...
and I really meant the welcome
to D.U. (and anyway I'm rubbish..:)
good luck with it all...
