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Chocolate
Crying robin up at dawn
heals the daybreak with a song,
sees a worm and takes a bite
world erupts in sweet delight.
heals the daybreak with a song,
sees a worm and takes a bite
world erupts in sweet delight.
Published 4th Apr 2014
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5th Apr 2014 5:13am
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Anonymous
- Edited 25th May 2014 2:10am
25th May 2014 1:41am
Although from the outset this looks quite simple, it really isn't so. I mean, to come up with those words in that order. Try doing it, I'd say.
For me, this imagery seems the right way to start the day.
One more thing, I would go as far as to say this piece would even sit comfortably in the 'upbeat poems' section.
For me, this imagery seems the right way to start the day.
One more thing, I would go as far as to say this piece would even sit comfortably in the 'upbeat poems' section.
26th May 2014 11:12pm
Thanks, I'm glad you liked it. There's nothing wrong with being simple; some of my favorite songs use only two or three chords and they're still beautiful.
