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crazy or lost
Tumbling down stairs
Too the top floor
Staring at heaven
From hells floor
Calmly seeking
Desperate pleas
Held together
With 1000 pieces
Chocking to death
With deep breaths
Going crazy
With sane thoughts
From corner to corner
In a round room
Trapped in open space
from my room
Completely lost
within my boundaries
mind held together
with scattered memories
time to wake up
from this reality
dream of pleasures
of obscurity
Too the top floor
Staring at heaven
From hells floor
Calmly seeking
Desperate pleas
Held together
With 1000 pieces
Chocking to death
With deep breaths
Going crazy
With sane thoughts
From corner to corner
In a round room
Trapped in open space
from my room
Completely lost
within my boundaries
mind held together
with scattered memories
time to wake up
from this reality
dream of pleasures
of obscurity
Published 13th Mar 2014
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13th Mar 2014 9:47pm
the disorienting feel is thick. You evoke emotions easily. :) Your quatrain is nice and tight.
14th Mar 2014 2:28pm
...how bout' 'lost in a crazy storm'. :) This ink is something special, ASoul! :)
"Completely lost
within my boundaries
mind held together
with scattered memories"<--love that! We all have come close to falling off a ledge, where we're hanging on, by a thread....Xo
"Completely lost
within my boundaries
mind held together
with scattered memories"<--love that! We all have come close to falling off a ledge, where we're hanging on, by a thread....Xo
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Anonymous
15th Mar 2014 1:26am
You must of been writing in my mind. Perfect description of me right now. Tears came to me when I read this offline earlier today and now. Relate to this probably too much. :)
15th Mar 2014 1:48pm
Are chaotic minds scurry about with no regard to our soul and heart, sometimes we just have to hold on for the ride. Thank you always for your graces.
15th Mar 2014 2:33am
A contradiction within itself that comes together perfectly. Favorite part:
"From corner to corner
In a round room
Trapped in open space
from my room"
"From corner to corner
In a round room
Trapped in open space
from my room"
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5th May 2014 6:34pm
Awakened..this was a different and strangely satisfying read ..love the yin and yang of it :) with deepest respect..xoxo domore
5th May 2014 6:41pm
It is strange, has a soothing effect of some sort, Thank you Domore for stepping into my realm, you are most welcome.
