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a Sunday's domesticities (3-word-lines challenge from PTM)
we wake together
sunrise taunting triumphant
sleep, sweet memory
a lazy Sunday
kids scrambling blankets
bouncing on pillows
nowhere to go...
I groan complaint
you mockingly huff
we hide undercover
eye to eye
share knowing smiles
empty the bed
nodding to orders
down the hall
nippers bay "breakfast"
chocolate chip pancakes
cheese omelette burritos
pear and banana
cereal, no milk...
we're completely full
always completely cool
watching morning cartoons
blasting classic blues
letting toddlers play
the others pwn,
killing some bloke
online via Xbox.
morning hums happy
another half hour
so we kiss
and I read
and you write.
I think I followed the rules. :]
sunrise taunting triumphant
sleep, sweet memory
a lazy Sunday
kids scrambling blankets
bouncing on pillows
nowhere to go...
I groan complaint
you mockingly huff
we hide undercover
eye to eye
share knowing smiles
empty the bed
nodding to orders
down the hall
nippers bay "breakfast"
chocolate chip pancakes
cheese omelette burritos
pear and banana
cereal, no milk...
we're completely full
always completely cool
watching morning cartoons
blasting classic blues
letting toddlers play
the others pwn,
killing some bloke
online via Xbox.
morning hums happy
another half hour
so we kiss
and I read
and you write.
I think I followed the rules. :]
Published 3rd Mar 2011
| Edited 10th Mar 2011
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3rd Mar 2011 11:27pm
'we hide undercover
eye to eye
share knowing smiles.' Completely smitten with both words and ideal. Sounds perfect m'dear, utterly, suffocatingly easy to read and fall for.
eye to eye
share knowing smiles.' Completely smitten with both words and ideal. Sounds perfect m'dear, utterly, suffocatingly easy to read and fall for.
3rd Mar 2011 11:39pm
huge grin on me right now, thank you so much! i just tagged you in it elsewhere. [:
made me realized that I somehow have something maternal in me!(?) (can you believe that? haha!) Gosh, I really adore this... makes me wanna make babies, haha I'm soooo joking!
Awww, this is soo cute, touched something in me... For that I'll include this on my reading list! :)
'everyone seems happy
another half hour
so we kiss
and I read
and you write.' ---I'm smiling!
Awww, this is soo cute, touched something in me... For that I'll include this on my reading list! :)
'everyone seems happy
another half hour
so we kiss
and I read
and you write.' ---I'm smiling!
that's so sweet, i'm glad it could stir something in your roots even if i haven't converted you completely. [:
5th Mar 2011 12:17pm
...or something like it, elsewhere, but damn, Jacki~this is such a sweet and lovely study of modern family life, and it makes me long for those Sundays with my children again. Nice piece (and yeah, I think you stuck to the rules!).
thank you so much; i edited it a bit and hoped i didn't lose that simple, light feel. your good word is gold. [:
12th Apr 2011 3:09am
12th Apr 2011 7:08am
